1. Posted: August 6, 2017In:

    When a world renowned psychiatrist dies and goes to Hell, he is given a second chance at life to make amends with the family he ignored, not knowing he is part of a bigger plan for Hell to dominate Earth.

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    The premise, in effect, makes him a supporting character in a plot instigated, ergo owned, by some other character. He's a pawn, a dupe, instead of a ?genuine protagonist because his "objective goal" is a sham, a stalking horse, a subplot to the major plot.His plot -- the one that really matters, thRead more

    The premise, in effect, makes him a supporting character in a plot instigated, ergo owned, by some other character. He’s a pawn, a dupe, instead of a ?genuine protagonist because his “objective goal” is a sham, a stalking horse, a subplot to the major plot.

    His plot — the one that really matters, the one with the biggest stakes — would only begin when he realizes he’s a pawn in somebody else’s game, refuses to play that game and instigates his own game plan. ?And when is that?

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  2. Posted: August 4, 2017In:

    Thanks!

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    The fact that you come up with so many variations on the logline seems to be a symptom of too many moving parts in the plot. And one of the most important moving parts isn't even mentioned. ?To wit, ?how is it possible for him to trip back through time? ?Who enables him? And why? What is their purpoRead more

    The fact that you come up with so many variations on the logline seems to be a symptom of too many moving parts in the plot.

    And one of the most important moving parts isn’t even mentioned. ?To wit, ?how is it possible for him to trip back through time? ?Who enables him?

    And why? What is their purpose in sending a prisoner back in time? What is at stake? ?Backwards and forwards in time, there a legions of people needing to be rescued. ?Why this blind girl? ?What is so important about her that she has been targeted to be rescued? ?And why, of all the possible rescuers, do they assign the mission to a criminal? ?If she’s so important, why don’t they send a doctor, or someone with demonstrated humanitarian impulses and skills?

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  3. Posted: August 4, 2017In:

    after-surviving-a-serial-killer-attack-thanks-to-the-donated-organs-of-three-girls-arata-must-remember-the-identity-of-the-murder-who-attacked-him-while-the-spirits-of-the-girls-of-its-new-organs-fol

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    Why must he remember the ID of the murderer? ?To what purpose? What is the objective goal entailed in remembering?And this is a comedy??? ?What's so funny about a serial murder?

    Why must he remember the ID of the murderer? ?To what purpose? What is the objective goal entailed in remembering?

    And this is a comedy??? ?What’s so funny about a serial murder?

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