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  1. Posted: March 4, 2017In: Drama

    A rapier wielding Latina vigilante disrupts the plans of a drug and human trafficking gang that uses fake ICE vehicles and gear to kidnap undocumented Latinas.

    dpg Singularity
    Added an answer on March 5, 2017 at 1:08 am

    The best films are about characters who are forced to grow, who change, who are not just stamped out sui generis from a superhero template. I think the character needs an origin story in terms of an inciting incident that triggers a character transformation and explains why/how she becomes a vigilanRead more

    The best films are about characters who are forced to grow, who change, who are not just stamped out sui generis from a superhero template. I think the character needs an origin story in terms of an inciting incident that triggers a character transformation and explains why/how she becomes a vigilante.

    A lot of dramatic interest is forfeited if she makes her 1st appearance on the screen as a fully formed rapier wielding vigilante. ? The audience will want to know how she became this way. ? There has to be a compelling emotional reason why she is a vigilante and that needs to be established before we see the action that follows from that emotion.

    The weaker way is slam the brakes on the main rescue story half way through for an expository flashback. ?The stronger way is to launch the story with an inciting incident that sets in motion her character arc and her objective goal.

    And I think there is a mother lode of ?raw dramatic material in the real lives and struggles of the undocumented immigrant population in the US from which to mine a narrative that is anything but ?a “cookie-cutter” origin story.

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  2. Posted: March 4, 2017In: Drama

    A rapier wielding Latina vigilante disrupts the plans of a drug and human trafficking gang that uses fake ICE vehicles and gear to kidnap undocumented Latinas.

    dpg Singularity
    Added an answer on March 4, 2017 at 9:03 am

    I was immediately hooked by the character, "a rapier wielding Latina vigilante". ?I like the fact that the protagonist is a strong female character.In fact, the idea that immediately came to my mind was: ?think and write beyond a one-off feature film. ?Think and write in terms of a franchise or seriRead more

    I was immediately hooked by the character, “a rapier wielding Latina vigilante”. ?I like the fact that the protagonist is a strong female character.

    In fact, the idea that immediately came to my mind was: ?think and write beyond a one-off feature film. ?Think and write in terms of a franchise or series. ?Franchises and series are built around strong, interesting characters, and I think she has the potential to be one.

    Whatever?way you want to go, ?I suggest that the logline be refashioned to focus on an??origin story. ?That is, ?the inciting incident that turned her from an ordinary Latina into a rapier wielding, ass-kicking, “mucho macho” Latina. ? For example, ?a younger sister is kidnapped for a sex trafficking ring. ?Make it not just a matter of justice, but personal.

    Good luck with developing a story for the character. ?I think she’s a winner.

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  3. Posted: March 2, 2017In: Drama

    After his daughter is diagnosed with a rare cancer, a timid college professor and his jailbird uncle start a prostitution service in order to pay for her experimental treatments.

    dpg Singularity
    Added an answer on March 3, 2017 at 8:06 am

    The problem ?I see with ?your concept ? in terms of gay ?prostitution is that it's a young guy's trade. ? The most desirable "bun boys" and "rent boys" are just that, young men. ? Women have the "benefit" of a wider ?age spectrum, more years, into which to ply their trade. ?There is a market for 30+Read more

    The problem ?I see with ?your concept ? in terms of gay ?prostitution is that it’s a young guy’s trade. ? The most desirable “bun boys” and “rent boys” are just that, young men. ? Women have the “benefit” of a wider ?age spectrum, more years, into which to ply their trade. ?There is a market for 30+ women, ?MILF’s and cougars. ?The market for ?30+ ?men ?is ?small, a niche market.

    The story concept of straight middle-aged males servicing women — as you noted, that’s already been done (more than once)

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