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Working title: MISSLE (or GOD OF DESTRUCTION) Logline: After helplessly witnessing his brother murdered by a vicious gang, a disabled man in LA sets out one night on his homemade killing machine to seek vengeance.
Agree with Nir Shelter. ?The goal is purely negative. ?Worse, the character seems to have succumbed to the Jungian Shadow, aka the Captain Ahab syndrome (in Moby Dick). ?As Nietzsche put it: ??He who fights with monsters should be careful lest thereby becomes a monster. And if thou gaze long into anRead more
Agree with Nir Shelter. ?The goal is purely negative. ?Worse, the character seems to have succumbed to the Jungian Shadow, aka the Captain Ahab syndrome (in Moby Dick). ?As Nietzsche put it: ??He who fights with monsters should be careful lest thereby becomes a monster. And if thou gaze long into an abyss, the abyss will also gaze into thee.? (Beyond Good and Evil)
The protagonist has become the evil he seeks to destroy. (He’s obviously fueled by a lot of 100 octane rage and hate to be able to invest all that time, effort, ingenuity and expense to build the “killing machine”. ) ?Is that the character arc you intend for your main character? ?To ?transform him from a nice guy into an avenging angel? ?To have your main character’s soul self-destruct even if his body survives the ordeal? ?Or do you have some other character arc in mind?
See lessWhen a young ward of the state is fostered to a crazy family planning a heist, he sets out to find his real father before being forced to engage in criminal activities that will see him back in juvenile prison.
Not that it needs to be in the logline, but what do they have on him that they can use as blackmail to force him to participate in the heist? If he doesn't comply, he goes back to prison. If he complies, he still risks going back to prison if they're caught. ?So either way, the possibility of prisonRead more
Not that it needs to be in the logline, but what do they have on him that they can use as blackmail to force him to participate in the heist?
If he doesn’t comply, he goes back to prison. If he complies, he still risks going back to prison if they’re caught. ?So either way, the possibility of prison hangs over him like the sword of Damocles. ?That’s not a bad thing, dramatically. ?I just want to understand that ?the choices he faces are prison as a certainty versus prison as a possibility.
See lessWhen a young ward of the state is fostered to a crazy family planning a heist, he sets out to find his real father before being forced to engage in criminal activities that will see him back in juvenile prison.
Benny:Parsing your revised version still leaves questions in my mind. ?As written, it seems to say that his objective goal is to go along with the heist so he can find his father. ?Is that what you intend to mean by saying he will ? "do anything and risk everything"? Or is his objective goal to findRead more
Benny:
Parsing your revised version still leaves questions in my mind. ?As written, it seems to say that his objective goal is to go along with the heist so he can find his father. ?Is that what you intend to mean by saying he will ? “do anything and risk everything”? Or is his objective goal to find his father before ?(ticking clock) the heist takes place?
And if it is the latter, I’m still having trouble believing the crooked foster family would let him out of their sight, let him go look for his father. ?Because if they let him search and he succeeds, there goes the leverage they have over him. ?(Another reason they wouldn’t let him out of their sight would be for fear he’d snitch to the police.)
Please clarify.
Also, now that I know that the story is set in Australia, is the kid European or Aboriginal? ?It occurs to me that if he were the latter and the foster family is the former, it might intensify his sense of alienation and isolation and strengthen his motivation to find his father as well as reconnect with his ethnic roots. ? However, I don’t know if the?current policy is to?allow the placement Aboriginal orphans with non-Aboriginal families. ?(I do know that in the United States, the general policy is now to make every effort to place Native American orphans with a family of their tribe. ?Or at least their ethnic kind.)
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