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A pizza delivery driver that resents Superheroes, is inadvertently stuck protecting one when the worlds greatest supervillain arrives in his city during a typical afternoon shift.
Carl_Barnes:I? occasionaly ask for backstory information not necessarily because I think it needs to be in the logline but to better understand the story you have in mind and to provide informed feedback.Right now resentment seems to be his character flaw.? It poses a dangling question in readers' mRead more
Carl_Barnes:
I? occasionaly ask for backstory information not necessarily because I think it needs to be in the logline but to better understand the story you have in mind and to provide informed feedback.
Right now resentment seems to be his character flaw.? It poses a dangling question in readers’ mind.? I’m guessing? later or sooner the plot will reveal why and eventually resolve? — it seems to pertain to his character arc.
So what’s the backstory?? Why does he have an ax to grind against superheroes?
(P.S. When you finally field the logline to market the script,? I urge you proofread for grammar.? For instance, it should be “driver who” not? “driver that”.? First impressions are everything.)
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Suggest it might be more interesting if he doesn't believe in super heroes.? He ridicules those who do, who are fans of the movies and magazines. And then... One challenge is to come with a brand new super hero and a brand new super villain.? Got ones in mind? What are there unique powers that diffeRead more
Suggest it might be more interesting if he doesn’t believe in super heroes.? He ridicules those who do, who are fans of the movies and magazines.
And then…
One challenge is to come with a brand new super hero and a brand new super villain.? Got ones in mind? What are there unique powers that differentiates them from characters in the existing Marvel and D.C. universes? You can’t use or imitate those? characters — they are trademarked and fiercely defended by a legion of lawyers.
Just saying.
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Keymiser:Transgender must be in the logline.? Must, MUST, MUST.? It's your differentiating story hook.And I suggest using the more common term "empathetic" in the logline.? Spell it out.That said, in the script,? definitely develop how her intense awareness of others' feeling plays out as both a chaRead more
Keymiser:
Transgender must be in the logline.? Must, MUST, MUST.? It’s your differentiating story hook.
And I suggest using the more common term “empathetic” in the logline.? Spell it out.
That said, in the script,? definitely develop how her intense awareness of others’ feeling plays out as both a character strength and a character weakness.? For example, a critic of her decision, someone who knows her all too well (like her mother) could point out she’s always been an easy mark, a sucker for a hard luck story.
And she will also be acutely aware of the negative feelings of her boyfriend.? So emotionally she’s caught in a cross-fire, trapped between the horns of a dilemma, damned if she does,? damned if she doesn’t.
Whatever.? My takeaway is that I sense there’s dramatic gold to? be mined in her intense empathy.? (Are you aware of the Myers-Briggs typology? Your character would score at the far end of the feeling spectrum).
Best wishes with your project.
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