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A misguided and jaded guidance counselor, depressed as he may be, deals with the unexpected end of his relationship. During a series of fumbles and misadventures, he tries to make a big splash back into the dating pool.
The logline can easily be trimmed."A misguided and jaded guidance counselor, depressed as he may be, deals with the unexpected end of his relationship " --19 words -- can be shortened to "When a misguided and foolish guidance counselor gets dumped, he...." --10 words. (In loglining less is more.)WelRead more
The logline can easily be trimmed.
“A misguided and jaded guidance counselor, depressed as he may be, deals with the unexpected end of his relationship ” –19 words — can be shortened to “When a misguided and foolish guidance counselor gets dumped, he….” –10 words. (In loglining less is more.)
Well, people get dumped in movies all the time for all kinds of reasons.? What’s so special, unique about his getting dumped?
And more importantly for the purpose of a logline and plot what does he do? to dive back into the dating pool with a big splash??? “Making a big splash in the dating pool”– is a good phrase, but it needs more specificity. What exactly is his game plan??
“Fumbles and misadventures” — well, of course.? Those are standard issue items in a comedy.? What makes his fumbles and misadventures unique, different from all the other fumbles and misadventures in all the other romcoms?
What the premise needs is a good story hook.? A feature, a unique take or twist on the genre that separates it from all the other romcoms about all the other guys who dive back into the dating pool intending to make a big splash.
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See lessWhen passengers on a plane get murdered one by one, the crew must find the killer among them before there is only one left. [Title: Passengers, this isn’t your Captain speaking].
I'm dubious about the title.? Ever since 911, airline cockpits have been locked down.And I'm guessing it's an international flight over, say, the Pacific.? So the airline can't immediately touch down after the 1st murder-- which would be the SOP. So I suggest the logline indicate that.Given that theRead more
I’m dubious about the title.? Ever since 911, airline cockpits have been locked down.
And I’m guessing it’s an international flight over, say, the Pacific.? So the airline can’t immediately touch down after the 1st murder– which would be the SOP. So I suggest the logline indicate that.
Given that there’s so little privacy on the plane, it’s a stretch to believe that one person after another can be killed– and there are no witnesses.? That the crew are too stupid to take elementary precautions to prevent it from happening again… and again.? But I assume you’ve got that all figured out, a credible modus operandi.
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See lessA reckless, arrogant young Jewish hospital messenger rescues his relatives from the liquidation of the ghetto and becomes the last leader of the Warsaw ghetto uprising.
I am fully aware of the tragic uprising? in the Warsaw ghetto.? Is this based upon or inspired by the exploits of a real life person?
I am fully aware of the tragic uprising? in the Warsaw ghetto.? Is this based upon or inspired by the exploits of a real life person?
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