1. Posted: March 30, 2018In:

    During a wedding rehearsal, a bridesmaid is taken by pirates and becomes the prize of the battle of ego vs revenge between two of the most powerful pirate ships.

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    What is the protagonist of your story? the pirates? the woman? Why do pirates take the lady? She is special?

    What is the protagonist of your story? the pirates? the woman? Why do pirates take the lady? She is special?

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  2. Posted: May 2, 2018In:

    After they make a wish to kill their parents, a group of teenagers discover they?ve messed with an entity that makes this wish come true.

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    I think it's better to have a protagonist and also what is the conflict of your story? Is this entity bad or good? because they make a wish and he makes it come true.

    I think it’s better to have a protagonist and also what is the conflict of your story? Is this entity bad or good? because they make a wish and he makes it come true.

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  3. Posted: May 20, 2018In:

    When a disillusioned married woman is absorbed by a surrealist painting, she struggles to develop the power to free herself from the painting before becoming part of it, while falling in love with a man of painting.

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    This is the corrected logline, the original logline is: In an exhibition, after a woman enters a painting, her boyfriend must look for the painter before he leaving the exhibition.?

    This is the corrected logline, the original logline is:
    In an exhibition, after a woman enters a painting, her boyfriend must look for the painter before he leaving the exhibition.?

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