1. Posted: May 6, 2012In:

    How far would YOU go in pursuit of pirates and the perfect fish?

    Chris Andrews Penpusher

    I'm struggling a little with this one - doesn't tell me anything about the movie - not even the genre or tone. It could be a drama or a comedy, an action/adventure or a mixture of all of them. I' don't even know who it's about, what they want, or what's standing in their way.

    I’m struggling a little with this one – doesn’t tell me anything about the movie – not even the genre or tone. It could be a drama or a comedy, an action/adventure or a mixture of all of them. I’ don’t even know who it’s about, what they want, or what’s standing in their way.

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  2. Posted: May 5, 2012In:

    When a young, arrogant celebrity athlete is framed for blowing up the floating Imperial sky-palace, he escapes with a rag-tag bunch of surfacer teens into the planet's crime-ridden slums to bring to justice the Empire's most notorious terrorist — its ruler.

    Chris Andrews Penpusher

    I like it, though it's a little busy. 'Young, arrogant celebrity athlete' is just a little too wordy, and ditto with 'a rag-tag bunch of surfacer teens'. If you could cut both down to three words each, I think it would read a lot better.

    I like it, though it’s a little busy. ‘Young, arrogant celebrity athlete’ is just a little too wordy, and ditto with ‘a rag-tag bunch of surfacer teens’. If you could cut both down to three words each, I think it would read a lot better.

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