After reading the short, I affirm that this needs to proceed with the daughter front and center. I believe she should be the main character who helps her father get over his friends tragic death. See the return notes that I sent you.

While the short was well written and certainly a heart warming tale, too much of it is on the imagination side, when the opportunity to have his daughter, who only appears in the 2nd half of the script, can be used to draw out this man’s grief after he finds out that his childhood friend, the one who he plays fake astronaut with, ?actually does become a real astronaut, yet dies on a space mission.

“A daughter helps her father to recreate his childhood moments and come to terms with his best friend’s tragic death.”