1. Posted: June 3, 2017In:

    A teenage Jewish boy in a Nazi death camp sets out to keep the promise of love with Hitler’s daughter and find the mystery of her who once tricked him as Jewish from the genocide.

    Foxtrot25 Uberwriter

    Agree with Richiev on this, excellent advice and I wish you luck with this interesting angle on Hollywood's most interesting man ever: A. HITLER.

    Agree with Richiev on this, excellent advice and I wish you luck with this interesting angle on Hollywood’s most interesting man ever: A. HITLER.

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  2. Posted: June 3, 2017In:

    As a cops races against time to prevent another murder, his own, as he struggles to forgive himself against the misguided belief he?s liable for all these murders.

    Foxtrot25 Uberwriter

    Captain, As is, you have 2 run on sentences sandwiched between "his own". I suggest you redo the syntax. Don't indicate that his main internal struggle is misguided. We need to find that out on our own. I assume you are using time travel or something here?

    Captain,

    As is, you have 2 run on sentences sandwiched between “his own”. I suggest you redo the syntax.

    Don’t indicate that his main internal struggle is misguided. We need to find that out on our own.

    I assume you are using time travel or something here?

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  3. Posted: June 3, 2017In:

    When a desperate Wisconsin farm wife invites WWII Nazi POWs to work the family orchard, she brings the war home.

    Foxtrot25 Uberwriter

    Lucy, I believe you need to elaborate on what the farm wife needs to overcome after the pow's arrive on the farm. Therefore, I would begin something like this... After a desperate housewife uses Nazi POW's to work on her farm, she must... before...

    Lucy,

    I believe you need to elaborate on what the farm wife needs to overcome after the pow’s arrive on the farm.

    Therefore, I would begin something like this…

    After a desperate housewife uses Nazi POW’s to work on her farm, she must… before…

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