1. Posted: December 31, 2017In:

    Man who used to be a woman gives birth to a baby by woman who used to be a man.

    Foxtrot25 Uberwriter

    I want to run on line to get tickets and see that -- not.

    I want to run on line to get tickets and see that — not.

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  2. Posted: December 29, 2017In:

    After instructing his viewers to boycott a product a bombastic news anchor is held hostage by a fired employee who is determined to make him pay with his life.

    Foxtrot25 Uberwriter

    This example would read better if you rewrite it focusing on what the victim/protagonist needs to overcome and a little bit more of what he needs to do for it. A ticking time bomb would help too.

    This example would read better if you rewrite it focusing on what the victim/protagonist needs to overcome and a little bit more of what he needs to do for it. A ticking time bomb would help too.

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  3. Posted: December 28, 2017In:

    An reluctant bride is caught between her soon to be husband and her best friend who is intent on her becoming his bride by any means necessary.

    Foxtrot25 Uberwriter

    I'm confused as to whom is intent on her to be married, the would-be husband or the best friend?

    I’m confused as to whom is intent on her to be married, the would-be husband or the best friend?

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