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A 45 year old poor family man is diagnosed with a leg disease for which he will need surgery and afterwards 3 months of rest. He must now choose between getting the surgery or keeping his job as a night guard to support his family.
Thank you for your comment, it gave me a whole different perspective on things. Do you have any ideas on how to raise the stakes ? Do you think it's possible by changing one of its parts or should I just change the whole dilemma ? I should say that I am trying to write a short film, so I don't needRead more
Thank you for your comment, it gave me a whole different perspective on things.
Do you have any ideas on how to raise the stakes ? Do you think it’s possible by changing one of its parts or should I just change the whole dilemma ?
I should say that I am trying to write a short film, so I don’t need to have a story for 110 pages.
How about this:
“A week after having leg surgery for which he would need 3 months rest, a 45 year old poor night guard returns to work in order to not loose his job and keep providing for his family. He encounters a group of burglars in a building garage and is unable to stop them.”
Here, his goal would be to keep his job, and the way he would do it would be by running after the burglars.
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The second part of your logline sounds a bit vague, maybe you could elaborate on that. What does the killer's next victim have that your protagonist needs to survive?
The second part of your logline sounds a bit vague, maybe you could elaborate on that. What does the killer’s next victim have that your protagonist needs to survive?
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The second part of your logline sounds a bit vague, maybe you could elaborate on that. What does the killer's next victim have that your protagonist needs to survive?
The second part of your logline sounds a bit vague, maybe you could elaborate on that. What does the killer’s next victim have that your protagonist needs to survive?
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