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After being lost at sea in the Bermuda Triangle and then finding themselves in an otherworldly gallery of paintings that become portals to strange worlds and other dimensions, will an unlikely group of teen misfits be able to band together long enough to find the door that leads them home, or will the sinister evil that brought them to this new reality keep them entrapped there forever?
Thank you dpg for your on-time comment. I hadn't thought an alpha-character would be necessary for the story line, but as I continue to learn and move forward, I realize that I do need to rethink that point of my script. I'm very grateful and excited about all of this external input: keep it coming!
Thank you dpg for your on-time comment. I hadn’t thought an alpha-character would be necessary for the story line, but as I continue to learn and move forward, I realize that I do need to rethink that point of my script.
I’m very grateful and excited about all of this external input: keep it coming!
See lessHigh school senior Koa Cohen's battle with ritualistic OCD is replaced by a condition in which he cannot distinguish between his unsettling day dreams and reality.
I like your idea of doing a character study on a high school student who struggles with self-control of both his thoughts and behavior: it's a very relative topic for today's youth. But I have to agree with dpg about the ritualistic OCD--it's not a disorder that can be simply turned off or replacedRead more
I like your idea of doing a character study on a high school student who struggles with self-control of both his thoughts and behavior: it’s a very relative topic for today’s youth.
But I have to agree with dpg about the ritualistic OCD–it’s not a disorder that can be simply turned off or replaced (unless your character has a supernatural transforming life experience, as your title suggests.) Furthermore, I’m not sure day dreams (or day mares in this case) are truly what you’re describing: everyone day dreams, up to nearly half of our lifetimes, but this ‘condition’ that your explaining is more akin to a psychotic disorder (perhaps Schizophrenia or even a split personality.) In which case, your character is developing less control of his mind.
I like the hope that your story line could provide, but rather than haphazardly finding a new perspective that gives him self control, maybe you add someone or something that sets him on the path to redemption.
Blessings on your endeavor!
See lessAfter being lost at sea in the Bermuda Triangle and then finding themselves in an otherworldly gallery of paintings that become portals to strange worlds and other dimensions, will an unlikely group of teen misfits be able to band together long enough to find the door that leads them home, or will the sinister evil that brought them to this new reality keep them entrapped there forever?
Here's a quick revision: After being lost in the Bermuda Triangle and then finding themselves in an otherworldly gallery of paintings that become portals to strange worlds, an unlikely group of teen misfits must band together to find the door that leads them home, or the sinister evil that brought tRead more
Here’s a quick revision:
After being lost in the Bermuda Triangle and then finding themselves in an otherworldly gallery of paintings that become portals to strange worlds, an unlikely group of teen misfits must band together to find the door that leads them home, or the sinister evil that brought them to this new reality will keep them entrapped there forever.
Please keep the comments coming. I really appreciate the critique: it encourages me to keep trying to improve.
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