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Interwined stories between a police officer, his daughter, a taxi driver and a Yakuza leader discover a prostitute’s murder while surviving the nuclear apocalypse in Tokyo, Japan.
IvyEight6, 1. Who are the four people involved, anything interesting about them or their profession? 2. What kind of apocalypse is your story set? e.g. zombie, nuclear. Take care.
IvyEight6,
1. Who are the four people involved, anything interesting about them or their profession?
2. What kind of apocalypse is your story set? e.g. zombie, nuclear.
Take care.
See less“When a group of social justice ANTIFA wannabe’s attack his retirement community, a legendary retired hitman and his old mob buddies show the young punks, they messed with the wrong town.”
Richiev, 1. Why would ANTIFA care about a bunch of old farts - missing that connection. 2. Not sure about the marketability of ANTIFA being in the logline 😉 probably could lose, and by the sounds of this logline - I would lay off the CNN for a while (jk) 3. Removed “wannabes” (too soft of a threat)Read more
Richiev,
See less1. Why would ANTIFA care about a bunch of old farts – missing that connection.
2. Not sure about the marketability of ANTIFA being in the logline 😉 probably could lose, and by the sounds of this logline – I would lay off the CNN for a while (jk)
3. Removed “wannabes” (too soft of a threat) and “retired” not needed because you included location.
Make this your’s brother, leaning towards:
“Threatened by social justice extremist hell-bent on destruction, a legendary hitman must reassemble his old mob buddies to defend their beloved retirement community”
When humanity decides to commit planetary suicide to escape the woes of post-apocalyptic life, a team is assembled to infiltrate and defeat the terrorist militia group standing in the way of nuclear self-annihilation.
I get this in a “The Dead Don’t Die” dark humor kind of way and DIG IT. Your right this is a fun one, I workshopped your elements then tried to add humor; I am sure DPG will tell me if I got it right or not 😉 (big fan brother!) Added focus to the vastness of Humanity, leaning towards: “Being done wiRead more
I get this in a “The Dead Don’t Die” dark humor kind of way and DIG IT. Your right this is a fun one, I workshopped your elements then tried to add humor; I am sure DPG will tell me if I got it right or not 😉 (big fan brother!)
Added focus to the vastness of Humanity, leaning towards:
“Being done with post-apocoliptia NATO seeks the help of an ex-zombie hunter to kill the “terrorists” standing in the way of nuclear self-annihilation”
Take care.
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