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REVISED: After WW III, a grieving journeyman electrician trapped in a secret underground AI lab, discovers two other survivors. Two arch enemies, both soliciting his help and holding the key to his escape, redemption and the future of humanity.
Interesting, here is my feedback based on your elaborations: - Label your protag as an electrician, not a maintenance man – this will make it more believable as a maintenance man would probably know every inch and not miss others for 1.5 years, also its easier to envision an electrician in a secreteRead more
Interesting, here is my feedback based on your elaborations:
– Label your protag as an electrician, not a maintenance man – this will make it more believable as a maintenance man would probably know every inch and not miss others for 1.5 years, also its easier to envision an electrician in a secrete AI lab, rather than a blue color maintenance man.
– BTW I like the idea of him using his electrical prowess to MacGyver an audio connection to others.
– The DR’s side is easy – kill the program that caused WWIII but think about how Meg grew to regret her actions and made Hope to atone, that maybe your twist that compels the electrician to choose her side.
“Set in a post-apocalyptic world controlled by AI, a surviving electrician must choose between the AI creator and the remorseful AI destroyer to save the future of humanity”
Take care.
See lessWhen she discovers that she let in a strange being in the guise of her dead son, she will be forced to make a decision, before the damage is greater.
Heavy, getting a Pet Cemetery vibe from this. Based on your second revision: "Pressed between an inquisitive priest and her memories of a mother, she must decide on the return of her dead son, before someone else does." I’m going to take some liberties with your story but it sounds like it begins whRead more
Heavy, getting a Pet Cemetery vibe from this.
Based on your second revision: “Pressed between an inquisitive priest and her memories of a mother, she must decide on the return of her dead son, before someone else does.”
I’m going to take some liberties with your story but it sounds like it begins when her dead son returns, then she is corned by a priest and her shattered mind, and the decision is to re-kill (or not) her son by whatever means needed before the church intervenes?
So, make this your own, but leaning towards:
“When the manifestation of her dead son appears, an overprotective mother must learn to let go before her inquisitive priest intervenes to destroy the abomination”
Take care.
See lessUn hombre encapuchado libera de su encarcelamiento a un joven ciega por error. Esa noche descubre que es la sobrina del rey, y la única superviviente de los Levende. Al mirarla fijamente ve el potencial y decide entranarla para acabar con el rey de Flertall.
"A hooded man frees a blind young man from imprisonment by mistake. That night he discovers that she is the king's niece, and the sole survivor of the Levende. Staring at her, he sees the potential and decides to train her to kill the King of Flertall." I dig it, but struggle with your protagonist,Read more
“A hooded man frees a blind young man from imprisonment by mistake. That night he discovers that she is the king’s niece, and the sole survivor of the Levende. Staring at her, he sees the potential and decides to train her to kill the King of Flertall.”
I dig it, but struggle with your protagonist, is it the warrior or the niece?
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