1. Posted: April 21, 2020In:

    A young team of investors are renovating some rundown rowhouses, and soon realize the neighborhood has a very dark history.

    Odie Samurai

    Sounds interesting but please check out this logline write-up by Richiev via (Home page > click Votes) to help remedy all the questions this has generated. On Loglines: There are certain answers to logline problems that many of us seem to repeat as we give advice. After reading ? rewrite and postRead more

    Sounds interesting but please check out this logline write-up by Richiev via (Home page > click Votes) to help remedy all the questions this has generated.

    On Loglines: There are certain answers to logline problems that many of us seem to repeat as we give advice.

    After reading ? rewrite and post. We get this will not be your final logline version, the goal is to present your logline in a way the community can help.

    No, I am not sponsored by Richiev ? ? it?s just good stuff.

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  2. Posted: April 4, 2020In:

    An overnight caregiver and a bored stiff succubus form an unlikely alliance to launch a dark web speed dating site.

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    Odie Samurai

    Thoughts? Think I am getting closer, but its starting to elude me again ;) "A hell-bent overnight caregiver must evade the law after botching the launch of a dark web speed dating site to relocate his clingy succubus to more enticing fresh meat."

    Thoughts? Think I am getting closer, but its starting to elude me again 😉

    “A hell-bent overnight caregiver must evade the law after botching the launch of a dark web speed dating site to relocate his clingy succubus to more enticing fresh meat.“

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  3. Posted: April 10, 2020In:

    A serial killer is driven by the voice of God to kill five killers ? in order to keep the woman he?s falling in love with, a Christian, who is giving him a conscience.

    Odie Samurai

    I dig it, but Killer, Kill, and Killers jump out at me. How about: ?is driven by what he believes is the voice of God? - holy war? ?to kill five? ? skin alive five? Whatever method the Serial Killer is good at replaces ?kill?. ?five killers? ? five murderers or five child molesters. ?in order to keeRead more

    I dig it, but Killer, Kill, and Killers jump out at me.

    How about:

    • ?is driven by what he believes is the voice of God? – holy war?
    • ?to kill five? ? skin alive five? Whatever method the Serial Killer is good at replaces ?kill?.
    • ?five killers? ? five murderers or five child molesters.
    • ?in order to keep the woman he?s falling in love with, a Christian,? ? I am unable to connect the plot dots with this wording so I start drifting to the logline ?To win the love of a?? which I don?t think is the right direction.
    • Why five? Was the relationship with a person of faith the reason he now hears from God?
    • Does she know he is a baddie?
    • Even if redemption happens/he kills the five, reality states they cannot live happily ever after. There will be consequences that are good for your logline e.g. what happens if she fails ?rubbing off? on him is she the next victim? What if one of the five revenge – against his girl? What happens if he gets busted by his girl or police?
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