1. Posted: May 11, 2020In:

    When a troubled mother is suddenly widowed and a father?s affair comes to light, devastating secrets slowly unravel, but her dysfunctional family are quick to break.

    Odie Samurai

    Jonathon, a couple of questions please: Why is the mother troubled? Does she suffer from drug abuse, alcoholism, spousal abuse? Why is the family dysfunctional? They were like this before he died, and they did not know about the infidelity ? what is the main reason? What is the most damaging devastiRead more

    Jonathon, a couple of questions please:

    • Why is the mother troubled? Does she suffer from drug abuse, alcoholism, spousal abuse?
    • Why is the family dysfunctional? They were like this before he died, and they did not know about the infidelity ? what is the main reason?
    • What is the most damaging devasting secret? Another family shows up to the funeral with ties to the mob? If its a bunch of bad dad stuff, not sure it adds to your logline.

    Example:

    After being suddenly widowed by her abusive husband, an XXX mother must ?

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  2. Posted: May 11, 2020In:

    After falling in love with twin sisters, an irresolute Iranian student has to decide with whom he wants to spend his life with before getting forcibly married to an unkown woman by his family.

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    Odie Samurai

    I dig it Savinh0. Since he is a student, I used the graduation as a deadline: After falling for twin sisters, an Iranian student must decide whom he wants to marry before the arranged marriage to a stranger upon his graduation. Why Iranian? India tops Iran in arranged/forced marriages. There could bRead more

    I dig it Savinh0.

    Since he is a student, I used the graduation as a deadline:
    After falling for twin sisters, an Iranian student must decide whom he wants to marry before the arranged marriage to a stranger upon his graduation.

    • Why Iranian? India tops Iran in arranged/forced marriages.
    • There could be an angle where the sisters are from his (village), and he is an accomplished student that is going places (big city) and the person whom his parents want to hook him up with is a (big city girl) with lots of connections.
    • Appears polygamy is legal in Iran, so there could be a (sister wives) scenario where the student must convince all parties ?they? are in love and must accept their choice to thwart the arranged marriage.

    Keep it up!

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  3. Posted: May 4, 2020In:

    After being built as a cyborg by a fellow vampire, a young woman must race against time to kill vampires who tries to invade her town so that she can be human again.

    Odie Samurai

    Tony, I dig it - this is what I can "see" so far. My hope is that you can fill in my liberties with your story, with the help of the inquiries above to make this yours. A vampiress modified by cybernetics to perform daily work in a picturesque town must defend her newfound home after rebelling againRead more

    Tony, I dig it – this is what I can “see” so far.

    My hope is that you can fill in my liberties with your story, with the help of the inquiries above to make this yours.

    A vampiress modified by cybernetics to perform daily work in a picturesque town must defend her newfound home after rebelling against the vampire horde.

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