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  1. Posted: December 3, 2021In: Drama

    After he loses all his money in the stock market and Las Vegas, a successful financial advisor has an opportunity to get out of debt—if he facilitates the takeover and dismantling of a friend’s family business.

    Odie Samurai
    Replied to answer on December 7, 2021 at 1:32 am

    Dilemma 2 requires the same gravity/answer for Dilemma 1 “bankruptcy”. This has to be his biggest score; thus “a sizable fee” won’t cut it. Also, bring this closer to the home concerning whom he screws over. In its current form, it sounds like a friend of a friend situation which lessens the impact.Read more

    Dilemma 2 requires the same gravity/answer for Dilemma 1 “bankruptcy”. This has to be his biggest score; thus “a sizable fee” won’t cut it. Also, bring this closer to the home concerning whom he screws over. In its current form, it sounds like a friend of a friend situation which lessens the impact. Add connecting tissue between what he’s good at and his friend’s “business.”

    Your major event “When his high-risk…” is good, also consider “risky schemes” as an alternative.

    Example:
    “A destitute financial advisor must choose between bankruptcy and fleecing his best friend’s firm”

    Industry examples:
    “A spoiled rich twentysomething must decide between true love and the vast fortune he’ll inherit if he marries a society woman whom he doesn’t love.”

    “After ten years on the run from the mob, the son of a mob lawyer must choose between prison and helping the man who killed his mother.”

    “A paraplegic marine dispatched to the moon Pandora on a unique mission becomes torn between following his orders and protecting the world he feels is his home.”

    BTW: I don’t normally add “his, hers” pronouns in the major event as we the reader are left in the shadows concerning whom you’re talking about – until the action/goal. I always try to challenge myself to construct the logline in a way to bypass.

    Take care.

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  2. Posted: December 3, 2021In: Drama

    After he loses all his money in the stock market and Las Vegas, a successful financial advisor has an opportunity to get out of debt—if he facilitates the takeover and dismantling of a friend’s family business.

    Odie Samurai
    Added an answer on December 4, 2021 at 12:37 am

    Leaning towards: “A bankrupt financial advisor [gambler] must choose between [dilemma 1] and [dilemma 2]” Make this yours, keep going! BTW: I wouldn’t call a financial advisor who went belly-up “successful.”

    Leaning towards:
    “A bankrupt financial advisor [gambler] must choose between [dilemma 1] and [dilemma 2]”
    Make this yours, keep going!
    BTW: I wouldn’t call a financial advisor who went belly-up “successful.”

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  3. Posted: December 1, 2021In: Television

    When a hardnose PR exec is hired by a company to pitch the takeover of her financially-strapped former hometown – nicknamed for its law to not openly celebrate Christmas – she must grapple with her painful past, a city manager who wants to save the town’s independence, and whether she still believes in the spirit of the season.

    Odie Samurai
    Added an answer on December 4, 2021 at 12:24 am

    Dig it, but a company taking over a town? Is she an exec for a big-box store that seeks to take over their primary source of income?

    Dig it, but a company taking over a town? Is she an exec for a big-box store that seeks to take over their primary source of income?

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