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Tasked to infiltrate a country of male supremacy, Lilly must suppress her rebellious nature to seize stolen technology in order to earn her freedom; but what else must she sacrifice on her mission to freedom?
Workshopping a bit: Who or what group/organization gave this directive? Who is Lilly? It appears "when the guys stole the girl’s tech", this is your inciting incident. What is this stolen tech? “but what else must she sacrifice…” is technically a teaser, you have one sentence - make it count. FantasRead more
Workshopping a bit:
Who or what group/organization gave this directive?
Who is Lilly?
It appears “when the guys stole the girl’s tech”, this is your inciting incident.
What is this stolen tech?
“but what else must she sacrifice…” is technically a teaser, you have one sentence – make it count.
Fantasy example, make this yours:
An amazon thief on death row must infiltrate and return their stolen shield rune from a rival male supremacy clan in order to earn her freedom.
Take care.
See lessAn alcoholic man’s life has changed when he goes into recovery when he becomes a teacher at a school he graduated from.
Leaning towards: “A recovering alcoholic turns to a life redeemed when he becomes a teacher at his alma mater.” Take care.
Leaning towards:
“A recovering alcoholic turns to a life redeemed when he becomes a teacher at his alma mater.”
Take care.
See lessA couple race against time to track down a high school student who murdered their daughter.
I’m missing the "why them" to save the day and not the police and why the parents of this murdered teen have to race against time - are they next? Keep going.
I’m missing the “why them” to save the day and not the police and why the parents of this murdered teen have to race against time – are they next?
Keep going.
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