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When a recently-widowed woman discovers that she has been declared deceased for the past three years, she must weave her way through a web of corruption, propaganda, and secrets in order to reclaim her life.
Thoughts: 1. Is your protag prominent? This will help anchor “corruption, propaganda, and secrets.” 2. Your hook “discovered declared dead” is good, but three years old, which begs the question “why now?” In this day and age, it would only take months before her bank card, etc. to be blocked. ExamplRead more
Thoughts:
1. Is your protag prominent? This will help anchor “corruption, propaganda, and secrets.”
2. Your hook “discovered declared dead” is good, but three years old, which begs the question “why now?” In this day and age, it would only take months before her bank card, etc. to be blocked.
Example:
“A newly widowed mayoress must weave her way through a web of corruption, deceit, and being inexplicably declared dead in order to reclaim her life.
Hope you find this constructive, make this yours – keep going!
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Sounds fun, probably a gold mine, but you need a WHY/GOAL. Example: A drunken duo pissed that concession prices are too damn high kidnaps their fav player holding him hostage until their ridic ransom demands are met. Take care.
Sounds fun, probably a gold mine, but you need a WHY/GOAL.
Example: A drunken duo pissed that concession prices are too damn high kidnaps their fav player holding him hostage until their ridic ransom demands are met.
Take care.
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Good points from Luke, leaning towards: “A Swede and her fellowship collide with the dark underbelly of Australian immigration when investigating the mysterious death of her husband.”
Good points from Luke, leaning towards:
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