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A player afraid of commitments must save the girl he love when she gets kidnapped by one of his other girlfriends
Hello :) I like your log line. Not much i can comment about. Maybe you should try to get some positiv stakes in there. What happens if he succeeds? The girl lives, something more? You could try saying something more about the other girlfriend, something that makes the stakes even higher and the tickRead more
Hello 🙂
I like your log line. Not much i can comment about.
Maybe you should try to get some positiv stakes in there.
What happens if he succeeds? The girl lives, something more?
You could try saying something more about the other girlfriend, something that makes the stakes even higher and the ticking clock even more visible.
Good luck 🙂
See lessA player afraid of commitments must save the girl he love when she gets kidnapped by one of his other girlfriends
Hello :) I like your log line. Not much i can comment about. Maybe you should try to get some positiv stakes in there. What happens if he succeeds? The girl lives, something more? You could try saying something more about the other girlfriend, something that makes the stakes even higher and the tickRead more
Hello 🙂
I like your log line. Not much i can comment about.
Maybe you should try to get some positiv stakes in there.
What happens if he succeeds? The girl lives, something more?
You could try saying something more about the other girlfriend, something that makes the stakes even higher and the ticking clock even more visible.
Good luck 🙂
See lessAfter failing his final mission to receive his wings and graduate to guardianship, an angel must work with his client – a depressed mime ? to help him discover reasons to continue living and to fulfill his own quest of becoming a guardian angel.
Sounds intriguing When i read it the first time i was a bit confused about who was what and who's the MC. Maybe something you can be more specific about. Why does the MC have to work with his client? If you give the MC a reason to do it now it will be more interesting. I understand the reason is becRead more
Sounds intriguing
When i read it the first time i was a bit confused about who was what and who’s the MC. Maybe something you can be more specific about.
Why does the MC have to work with his client?
If you give the MC a reason to do it now it will be more interesting.
I understand the reason is because the MC didn’t become a guardian angel but why is it so important to him to become a guardian angel now?
I also think you need some negative stakes. What will happen if your MC does not succeed?
Now it sounds like this could go on forever and if the MC does not succeed it’s not that big of a deal?
What happens if the MC doesn’t become a guardian angel? will he die after a certain age? Will he become just regular?
These two things go together so i think you can try to put a ticking clock and a negative stake in log line.
Good luck 🙂
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