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A soldier returns to his hometown only to find it more corrupt then before he left. In order to fix things he must go against everything he stands for.
?Hello Clint,Personnally, I?like 'everything he stands for', which implies he is sensed also as a corrupt person:'When a?soldier finds his?hometown more corrupt than before?he left, he must fight his own world?to fix things.'?'When a?soldier finds his?hometown more corrupt than when?he left, he mustRead more
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Hello Clint,
Personnally, I?like ‘everything he stands for’, which implies he is sensed also as a corrupt person:
‘When a?soldier finds his?hometown more corrupt than before?he left, he must fight his own world?to fix things.’
?’When a?soldier finds his?hometown more corrupt than when?he left, he must fight what?he stands for?to fix things.’
See lessIn the midst of his hired kill, a Hitman is visited by his drug abused Uncle and learns the essence of life through his six-year-old daughter.
Hello ?Clint,I don't agree with DPG whose advice matches with action movies (which is not exactly yours, unless I'm mistaken).IMO, you already have what you need in a logline (explicitement or implicitement): - a?catalyst (the visit of the uncle)- a hero (the hitman) - a flaw (he's a villain) - an aRead more
Hello ?Clint,
I don’t agree with DPG whose advice matches with action movies (which is not exactly yours, unless I’m mistaken).
IMO, you already have what you need in a logline (explicitement or implicitement):
– a?catalyst (the visit of the uncle)
– a hero (the hitman)
– a flaw (he’s a villain)
– an antagonist (his uncle and maybe his daughter)
– an external goal (kill his next victim)
– an obstacle/problem to solve (the visit of his drug abused uncle)
– Something at stakes (his reputation and security?and?maybe his daughter)
– a mentor (his 6 year old daughter)
– an inner goal (a way to redemption?)
– an arc… (which doesn’t mean he necessarily will changes of job. In a Tarantino’s movie, he would not hahaha!)
Is this lesson about life the manner how his 6 year old daughter deals with his uncle’s addiction and some other consideration about their mutual relation? or something similar?
If so, I find your logline good.
“When a hitman is visited?by his drug abused Uncle in the midst of a kill, he is given a chance to learn the essence of life through his six-year-old daughter.”
or
“When a hitman is visited?by his drug abused Uncle in the midst of a kill, he is given a lesson about the essence of life through his six-year-old daughter.”
Best.
See lessSeeking revenge for her sexual assault a woman crosses the line into vigilante; she is now hunted by police and the community she believes she protects.
Hello Craig, "When seeking revenge for her sexual assault, a vigilante finds herself hunted by the police and then by the community she believes protecting"
Hello Craig,
“When seeking revenge for her sexual assault, a vigilante finds herself hunted by the police and then by the community she believes protecting”
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