1. Posted: February 4, 2017In:

    While trying to aid a quadriplegic man with an alternative method, a blind music therapist accidentally materializes an unholy spirit from her patient?s troubled mind, and it?s up to them to fight against it.

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    Thanks a lot for the feedback. It means a lot to me and it's really helpful. The issue about the characteristics of the demon is a dilemma I have as far as how it is presented. My idea is that the demon is only an pretext for a story that is more based on the characters. In fact, is more of a dark pRead more

    Thanks a lot for the feedback. It means a lot to me and it’s really helpful. The issue about the characteristics of the demon is a dilemma I have as far as how it is presented. My idea is that the demon is only an pretext for a story that is more based on the characters. In fact, is more of a dark presence than something material. But I guess this needs to be redefined so the story has a clear direction and the main idea of the logline becomes clearer. Cheers.

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  2. Posted: February 1, 2017In:

    A victim of inner turmoil, twenty-year-old Stephanie disastrously endeavors to reclaim her joy and happiness.

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    Hi Gerald. I'm curious about what happened to her that caused her inner turmoil. I'm guessing it's a traumatic situation... or maybe not. It's not clear. Also, you can find joy and happiness in a wide variety of things. For some it's money, for some it's love, for other it's eating chocolate. I'm thRead more

    Hi Gerald. I’m curious about what happened to her that caused her inner turmoil. I’m guessing it’s a traumatic situation… or maybe not. It’s not clear. Also, you can find joy and happiness in a wide variety of things. For some it’s money, for some it’s love, for other it’s eating chocolate. I’m thinking that if she suffered because of something, she’s feeling incomplete. Her goal then may be to regain that or just getting to know what is that something she lost. Cheers.

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  3. Posted: February 2, 2017In:

    After her employers die in a city wide pandemic an Upper West Side nanny must navigate the violent streets to save their young son and put him on the last boat to safety.

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    Hi hannibalchew. I agree with those above that mention the fact that saving a boy who's not her son is not much of a convincing motivation. In my opinion, her goal should be to save her son after she witnesses what happens to her employers' son. As a matter of fact, the inciting incident may well beRead more

    Hi hannibalchew. I agree with those above that mention the fact that saving a boy who’s not her son is not much of a convincing motivation. In my opinion, her goal should be to save her son after she witnesses what happens to her employers’ son. As a matter of fact, the inciting incident may well be this particular situation, a fact that sets her plan on. Moreover, maybe this virus only afects small children, so you add up some suspense to the fact that she isn’t quite sure that her boy is completely safe until she saves him. In other words, it’s a nanny dealing with infected zombified children. I like the fact that this sounds like a non-stop zombie action flick, kind of a straightforward classic video game. Cheers.

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