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  1. Posted: July 28, 2012In: Public

    A troubled teen and his mother relocate to a small town where he attends a school run by a syndicate of bullies who terrorize students and teachers alike. A former bully himself he?s legally forbidden to engage in violent action ? instead he trains a group of outcasts how to defend themselves.

    JVGray
    Added an answer on July 29, 2012 at 11:12 pm

    I agree with what you're saying and you're right it does need to be distilled down for more impact and clarity. It is a bit clunky and we're all on the same page with "legally forbidden". Thank you, Lachie.

    I agree with what you’re saying and you’re right it does need to be distilled down for more impact and clarity. It is a bit clunky and we’re all on the same page with “legally forbidden”. Thank you, Lachie.

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  2. Posted: July 28, 2012In: Public

    A troubled teen and his mother relocate to a small town where he attends a school run by a syndicate of bullies who terrorize students and teachers alike. A former bully himself he?s legally forbidden to engage in violent action ? instead he trains a group of outcasts how to defend themselves.

    JVGray
    Added an answer on July 29, 2012 at 11:09 pm

    I was working on that being one of the factors. Thank you, Victor.

    I was working on that being one of the factors. Thank you, Victor.

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  3. Posted: July 28, 2012In: Public

    A troubled teen and his mother relocate to a small town where he attends a school run by a syndicate of bullies who terrorize students and teachers alike. A former bully himself he?s legally forbidden to engage in violent action ? instead he trains a group of outcasts how to defend themselves.

    JVGray
    Added an answer on July 29, 2012 at 11:08 pm

    Excellent point, Gabriel. I definitely need to revisit that to clarify.

    Excellent point, Gabriel. I definitely need to revisit that to clarify.

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