1. Posted: March 18, 2017In:

    A cash strapped hit-woman, must confront the demons of her past, while juggling the bone crunching world of professional hits and the guardianship of her deceased sisters kids.

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    Kaznats Logliner

    yeah the first thing that stuck out was the cliche' yet the concept was good, change it and I'll give you another shot

    yeah the first thing that stuck out was the cliche’ yet the concept was good, change it and I’ll give you another shot

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  2. Posted: March 21, 2017In:

    When a man tracks a Mesoamerican heirloom to Brazil, he learns he must choose between revenge for his father?s death, and the life that caused it

    Kaznats Logliner

    hey it caught my attention but they are right about using 'rare artifact' I also hated tracked, perhaps something along this line: A man inherits a rare Brazilian artifact and also a dilemma, avenge his father's death or 'and you lose me on the life that caused it', but edit it and I'll read your reRead more

    hey it caught my attention but they are right about using ‘rare artifact’ I also hated tracked, perhaps something along this line:
    A man inherits a rare Brazilian artifact and also a dilemma, avenge his father’s death or ‘and you lose me on the life that caused it’, but edit it and I’ll read your revision

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