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When an avid lens collector takes a photo with a mysterious camera, he is captured in a murder he can only hope to escape.
Yep, he should be a camera collector or just film restorer ?lens collector? just doesn?t sound right and I think general audience won?t have the knowledge of it so would waste time explaining the difference. It reminds me of the Red Dwarf episode where mutated development fluid allows to travel intoRead more
Yep, he should be a camera collector or just film restorer ?lens collector? just doesn?t sound right and I think general audience won?t have the knowledge of it so would waste time explaining the difference.
It reminds me of the Red Dwarf episode where mutated development fluid allows to travel into the photo within the confines of the photo
See lessDue to IVF and genetic changes humanity only exist in the future as twins or multiple births. A self-proclaimed leader decides that the natural balance has to be restored by what he calls natural selection. The tormented genius ?Daggy? Pollux fights against the execution of his love interest who’s been selected as the weaker one.
You have a great "What If" but from there it gets a bit clunky. He may call it Natural Selection, but that doesn't help a reader as it seems this character has created something that we don't know is it a hunger games type event? Also don't need to add character names. Also 'Natural Balance' seems oRead more
You have a great “What If” but from there it gets a bit clunky.
He may call it Natural Selection, but that doesn’t help a reader as it seems this character has created something that we don’t know is it a hunger games type event?
Also don’t need to add character names.
Also ‘Natural Balance’ seems odd as he’d want a cure to the problem and if people have triplets or more only killing one leaves still 2/3+ more kids. So doesn’t make sense.
I guess twins and triplets might increase population, but maybe it wouldn’t as you’d stop the first set of kids.
Like I say, I like the what if, but feel need to explore the story more to mine the gold from within. Hope that helps
See lessWhen a grieving widow learns her husband took a bullet intended for her, she must survive long enough to discover who wants her dead.
It would seem she would know why someone would want her dead, it isn?t like it happens everyday, so even if her husband took the bullet she?d probably have a good idea who did it. You could perhaps fix this by establishing a reason why the husband may have also been targeted. Maybe he has a past thaRead more
It would seem she would know why someone would want her dead, it isn?t like it happens everyday, so even if her husband took the bullet she?d probably have a good idea who did it.
You could perhaps fix this by establishing a reason why the husband may have also been targeted. Maybe he has a past that she assumes has comeback to haunt him, but in actuality it is her past that is coming to haunt her. Anyways, it just needs something to clarify how it is such a mystery that she didn?t know and wouldn?t know who would want them dead.
Of course you can have her explore obvious answers, but then your logline would need to reflect that she was the intended target ?When her husband is killed in an attempted gang-hit on her life, a by-the-book senator decides to use her position to start a turf war to wipe out all the gangs at once?
That may not be where you are going, it just puts the assignation upfront.
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