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In order to save his life, a grief-stricken mother must simultaneously rely upon and fight the medical system that caused her son's brain injury, all the while learning to let go of the boy he would have been and accept the boy he has become.
Perhaps better (and more accurate) still: "After hospital negligence leaves her son profoundly brain-injured, a mother consumed by anger risks alienating him as she struggles to let go of the boy he might have been and accept the boy he has become."
Perhaps better (and more accurate) still:
“After hospital negligence leaves her son profoundly brain-injured, a mother consumed by anger risks alienating him as she struggles to let go of the boy he might have been and accept the boy he has become.”
See lessIn order to save his life, a grief-stricken mother must simultaneously rely upon and fight the medical system that caused her son's brain injury, all the while learning to let go of the boy he would have been and accept the boy he has become.
Super. Thanks again. So, if I were to say something more like.. "After hospital negligence leaves her son profoundly brain-injured, a mother consumed by anger and battling addiction struggles to let go of the boy he might have been and accept the boy he has become." ..would that be more along the liRead more
Super. Thanks again. So, if I were to say something more like..
“After hospital negligence leaves her son profoundly brain-injured, a mother consumed by anger and battling addiction struggles to let go of the boy he might have been and accept the boy he has become.”
..would that be more along the lines of what you’re suggesting works better? I’m finding it difficult to use the “botched medical procedure” bit because it doesn’t accurately represent what happened, which was that medication was given to him that should not have been. It was a lack of due diligence on their part, however I hear your point around that.
Also.. there is a nice juicy piece of irony in here in that he is the one that ultimately becomes her teacher.. demonstrating how to live in the present vs. cling to the past and I’m still dying to work that into the logline somehow, but don’t see how that’s possible without weighing it down with too many words.
p.s. I love your question re: “..demons that require CGI to manifest on the screen”. You provoke great thought and make me realize how lazy we (as in I) can be with the use of language.
See lessIn order to save his life, a grief-stricken mother must simultaneously rely upon and fight the medical system that caused her son's brain injury, all the while learning to let go of the boy he would have been and accept the boy he has become.
Super. Thanks again. So, if I were to say something more like.. "After hospital negligence leaves her son profoundly brain-injured, a mother consumed by anger and battling addiction struggles to let go of the boy he might have been and accept the boy he has become." ..would that be more along the liRead more
Super. Thanks again. So, if I were to say something more like..
“After hospital negligence leaves her son profoundly brain-injured, a mother consumed by anger and battling addiction struggles to let go of the boy he might have been and accept the boy he has become.”
..would that be more along the lines of what you’re suggesting works better? I’m finding it difficult to use the “botched medical procedure” bit because it doesn’t accurately represent what happened, which was that medication was given to him that should not have been. It was a lack of due diligence on their part, however I hear your point around that.
Also.. there is a nice juicy piece of irony in here in that he is the one that ultimately becomes her teacher.. demonstrating how to live in the present vs. cling to the past and I’m still dying to work that into the logline somehow, but don’t see how that’s possible without weighing it down with too many words.
p.s. I love your question re: “..demons that require CGI to manifest on the screen”. You provoke great thought and make me realize how lazy we (as in I) can be with the use of language.
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