1. Posted: April 16, 2015In:

    A homicide detective goes on the run to prove his innocence after he?s framed for murder by a malevolent police cyber-intelligence.

    Leebo159

    Thanks Russ and Nir Shelter. Great feedback. Hopefully this revision works: Framed for murder, a detective hunts a homicidal scientist he captured and saw executed, who has seemingly returned to launch a new, more terrifying killing spree.

    Thanks Russ and Nir Shelter. Great feedback. Hopefully this revision works:

    Framed for murder, a detective hunts a homicidal scientist he captured and saw executed, who has seemingly returned to launch a new, more terrifying killing spree.

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  2. Posted: April 16, 2015In:

    After killing his boss a concaine enraged drug dealer goes on a sleep deprived 48 hour murderous rampage attempting take control of the drug network.

    Leebo159

    I like this. Just have a few revisions. After killing his boss, a coked-up drug dealer goes on a sleep deprived rampage murdering his way up to become the next drug kingpin.. I don't think you need 2 day. Maybe explain that in the synopsis.

    I like this. Just have a few revisions.

    After killing his boss, a coked-up drug dealer goes on a sleep deprived rampage murdering his way up to become the next drug kingpin..

    I don’t think you need 2 day. Maybe explain that in the synopsis.

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  3. Posted: April 16, 2015In:

    Abducted as a small child, a college hoop star must endure a season of unexpected obstacles when he sets out to find his long-lost dad.

    Leebo159

    How about this? A college hoop star?s faith clashes with forgiveness when he discovers that his mother is a fugitive who raised him under an assumed identity.

    How about this? A college hoop star?s faith clashes with forgiveness when he discovers that his mother is a fugitive who raised him under an assumed identity.

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