1. Posted: November 5, 2018In:

    A man looks for how his brother died, only to find it in the deadliest game known to man, a deadly version of soccer, which he plans to win become unstable when he finds the truth about his brother. (I revised)

    Leviathan Samurai

    I feel like I'm missing the cause and effect. Cause: He's looking for how his brother died. Effect: He gets caught up in the same game that killed his brother. I think I just created two causes and no effect.

    I feel like I’m missing the cause and effect. Cause: He’s looking for how his brother died. Effect: He gets caught up in the same game that killed his brother.

    I think I just created two causes and no effect.

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  2. Posted: October 30, 2018In:

    After being discharged for unauthorized actions, the wolf soldier works as a security guard for a rich CEO until he is ordered to take down a terrorist group in his hometown hellbent on destroying the Queen.

    Leviathan Samurai

    I felt like I left something out of this one. The stakes are destroying the queen to incite anarchy, but I felt that part was irrelevant.

    I felt like I left something out of this one. The stakes are destroying the queen to incite anarchy, but I felt that part was irrelevant.

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  3. Posted: October 28, 2018In:

    After Mankind’s potential for good, The Son of the Devil, in defiance of his father, arrives in Los Angeles to send the supernatural creatures back to hell before they take over the city and find the hole in the Gateway before they take over the world.

    Leviathan Samurai

    This new one is a little more wordy, but I'm hoping to cut it down as I figure out what I want the logline to truly be. I hope this is better than the original.

    This new one is a little more wordy, but I’m hoping to cut it down as I figure out what I want the logline to truly be. I hope this is better than the original.

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