1. Posted: September 5, 2015In:

    When an art fraud investigator receives a package containing a stolen diamond from a man claiming to be her long-lost brother, she discovers that her father masterminded an international diamond heist and then travels to Geneva and underground catacombs in the Siberia wilderness to locate the stolen diamonds and return them to their rightful owner in order to save her father, who she thought was dead, from the consequences

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    You have a beginning and an end. What is this 'journey'? It's like she gets sent a letter and then she goes on a trip. Yippee-shit, y'know? What does she actually DO to uncover this link and what happens if she DOES NOT?

    You have a beginning and an end. What is this ‘journey’? It’s like she gets sent a letter and then she goes on a trip. Yippee-shit, y’know?

    What does she actually DO to uncover this link and what happens if she DOES NOT?

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  2. Posted: September 4, 2015In:

    A woman whose mother was murdered when she was a child of twelve, is now, fifteen years later, working as a detective and still pursuing her mother's killer, who, it turns out, is closer than she thinks.

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    "Fifteen years after her mother's murder, a detective continues to pursue the killer, who is closer than she thinks." There, now you have another ten words to say what she must do to achieve her goal...

    “Fifteen years after her mother’s murder, a detective continues to pursue the killer, who is closer than she thinks.”

    There, now you have another ten words to say what she must do to achieve her goal…

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  3. Posted: September 1, 2015In:

    With the mysterious arrival of a stolen diamond, a forensic investigator goes on a quest to Siberia to uncover a decades-old international crime linked to her lost family

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    I get that her family is from Siberia, but maybe make that more clear?

    I get that her family is from Siberia, but maybe make that more clear?

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