1. Posted: March 12, 2013In:

    John is a 30 years old painter who after years long struggle finally makes it in life with new extraordinary painting technique, but mysteriously horrifying secrets of creating masterpieces cannot be hidden for long in a small city. Will John's secrets destroy his life forever or will he find a way out?

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    The concept seems interesting, but it is wordy. Try reworking it a bit.

    The concept seems interesting, but it is wordy. Try reworking it a bit.

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  2. Posted: March 11, 2013In:

    A young lieutenant?s assignment to turn an antiquated battle cruiser into a traveling museum becomes a life and death struggle when he and his retiree crew must defend a colony world under attack.

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    Try this one: A lieutenant?s assignment to turn an antiquated cruiser into a traveling museum is interrupted when he and members of the original crew are the only ones in range when a colony is attacked by alien raiders.

    Try this one: A lieutenant?s assignment to turn an antiquated cruiser into a traveling museum is interrupted when he and members of the original crew are the only ones in range when a colony is attacked by alien raiders.

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  3. Posted: March 11, 2013In:

    During an intergalactic war a battle fleet wins a decisive, but costly battle leaving an inexperienced commander to rally them when they are attacked by a gigantic space-faring beast that begins picking ships off one-by-one.

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    Thanks. I was worried about the length. I will try again.

    Thanks. I was worried about the length. I will try again.

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