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Chris has been brutalized throughout the history of mankind, turned into a demon by God, he vows to stop mankind’s brutal rampage
How? Who is Chris? (other than a demon). How has he been brutalised throughout the history of mankind and why is that relevant to the story other than a bit of back-story? Will doing this turn him back to what he was? Mankind's brutal rampage against....? Without understanding all of this, I don't rRead more
How? Who is Chris? (other than a demon). How has he been brutalised throughout the history of mankind and why is that relevant to the story other than a bit of back-story? Will doing this turn him back to what he was? Mankind’s brutal rampage against….?
Without understanding all of this, I don’t really understand the story. Most demons are bad guys, so you’ve to make sure his quest is something the audience will get behind. For that we need specifics.
We really don’t need his name. I’d rather know who he is.
By telling us he was turned into a demon by God, that suggests to me his goal is to be turned back? Is that the case? If so, make it sound like the goal in the logline, if not, I’d consider removing it altogether. Just referring to him as a *insert characteristic here* demon will do the job.
I’d say this is more Fantasy than SciFi.
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No worries at all. Does this have to be a movie? Could it be a limited series? It sounds like the episodic structure would lend itself really well to the format. I love watching a show where an entire episode diverges from the main plot and shows us more of a specific character - see Mike's episodeRead more
No worries at all. Does this have to be a movie? Could it be a limited series? It sounds like the episodic structure would lend itself really well to the format. I love watching a show where an entire episode diverges from the main plot and shows us more of a specific character – see Mike’s episode in season 1 of Better Call Saul.
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A logline's purpose isn't to entice people in with vague ideas, it's to give a clear and concise summary of the plot up to either the midpoint or end of Act II in as fewer words as possible. My point is that without a protagonist you have no plot. Therefore, this despite you saying "it's just a moviRead more
A logline’s purpose isn’t to entice people in with vague ideas, it’s to give a clear and concise summary of the plot up to either the midpoint or end of Act II in as fewer words as possible. My point is that without a protagonist you have no plot. Therefore, this despite you saying “it’s just a movie”, you haven’t actually given us a movie.
I’m not against the premise at all, but the questions I asked were not meant in a derogatory sense. These are questions people expect to be answered in a logline. See Richiev’s comments about the Hook vs the Reveal. If God is the protagonist, we need to know that. I’m not sure it can be a film with God as the lead character and NOT be a religious film… thematically – if God exists, you’re making a statement about religion. You might not intend it to be a religious film but it will be.
If God is the main character, what is his goal?
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