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Planet Earth is under alien occupation by the Reptilian Armada and their High Commander Rigel, is in search of his future Queen Sasha. Bound by a prophecy; Rigel and Sasha will marry bringing forth a child blending the bloodlines and forming an alliance between both their planets.
From what I've read it seems like you're writing the High Commander as the main character. I agree with the others that Sasha should be the main character so that you can have your audience empathise with her, but at this point you need and event (inciting incident) that forces her to do an action.Read more
From what I’ve read it seems like you’re writing the High Commander as the main character. I agree with the others that Sasha should be the main character so that you can have your audience empathise with her, but at this point you need and event (inciting incident) that forces her to do an action. I think I could see this story being about Sasha trying to escape from a marriage that the alien race are trying to force upon her? Just an idea.
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Yeah I definitely agree with all of these comments. I will come up with an improved logline and upload it soon.
Yeah I definitely agree with all of these comments. I will come up with an improved logline and upload it soon.
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