1. Posted: April 13, 2018In:

    Edit: A teenage boy transforms into a girl overnight when he meets his soulmate. He must find a solution to live with her again meanwhile she turns into a boy.

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    Set in post-apocalyptic period: As a key to human-race survival, two troubled hermaphrodites must conceive a child. Problems arise as the apocalyptic creatures seek the same (or the child or them).The last apocalyptic creatures can be replaced with your antagonists. But if this helps.I think the 'faRead more

    Set in post-apocalyptic period: As a key to human-race survival, two troubled hermaphrodites must conceive a child. Problems arise as the apocalyptic creatures seek the same (or the child or them).

    The last apocalyptic creatures can be replaced with your antagonists. But if this helps.
    I think the ‘falling in love’ thing can be the part of the bigger picture, hence did not mention.

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  2. Posted: April 12, 2018In:

    When he get caught up messing with his business distributor girl, a young upcoming producer must find a way to withstand his business from failing and the woman he fell in love with.

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    'After getting in trouble intimidating his female-distributor, the young promising producer must retrieve his business and his personal life.' If above mentioned line describes what you meant, then, this needs more work. You can come up with better confrontation. A hedonistic behavior is not an ideaRead more

    ‘After getting in trouble intimidating his female-distributor, the young promising producer must retrieve his business and his personal life.’

    If above mentioned line describes what you meant, then, this needs more work. You can come up with better confrontation. A hedonistic behavior is not an ideal major-conflict.

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  3. Posted: April 12, 2018In:

    Over a psychotherapy session, a man with failing marriage and too much history starts falling in love with his female therapist and must be stopped or she’d lose her license

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    'Too much history' - it is unclear. In my first Logline? I was pointed out about the unclear plot. I think that this gets in that category. You can make the log-line without mentioning about history, as it is going to be the character's journey in the script.The event of losing the license will onlyRead more

    ‘Too much history’ – it is unclear. In my first Logline? I was pointed out about the unclear plot. I think that this gets in that category. You can make the log-line without mentioning about history, as it is going to be the character’s journey in the script.

    The event of losing the license will only occur if Therapist too falls in love. Assuming that it will happen, you must try to mention it in your log-line.

    For E.g., If you start your script with your main character’s voice over who is describing his fondness towards the therapist and again comparing her with his ex-wife, it will set up your premise. That’s it. But other than that the above log-line won’t get you to the resolution part.

    If your character’s story has to revolve around the therapist you must mention her qualities, like an adjective describing her (in the log-line).

    You can also describe his ex wife through an adjective.

    Try to get the main goal of the character in the log-line. Figure out the goal that sets your story’s dramatic premise. Good Luck.

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