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When a zombie virus infects a small Southern town, a pregnant teen must fight the undead while hiding her condition from her conservative family.
Your logline implies two goals: fighting the undead and? keeping her pregnancy a secret which seems irrelevant in the face of town marauding zombies. Perhaps you can re-work it to show that keeping this secret is the teen's internal character flaw which she will overcome at the end of the story. I wRead more
Your logline implies two goals: fighting the undead and? keeping her pregnancy a secret which seems irrelevant in the face of town marauding zombies. Perhaps you can re-work it to show that keeping this secret is the teen’s internal character flaw which she will overcome at the end of the story. I would be interested to see another version of your logline. Hope this helps.
See lessAfter a deadly contagion takes his wife & daughter, a special forces operative must infiltrate the very military base he was once stationed to find the cure & exact his revenge.
You should only have one inciting incident which kicks off the story. Witnessing the experiments which cause him to abandon his career seems to be the backstory. Your second attempt is much better but it describe his goal. There must be a specific event that will indicate to the audience if the heroRead more
You should only have one inciting incident which kicks off the story. Witnessing the experiments which cause him to abandon his career seems to be the backstory. Your second attempt is much better but it describe his goal. There must be a specific event that will indicate to the audience if the hero has reached his goal, or failed. Best of luck.
See less“When her drink is spiked at a party a virgin finds herself pregnant and a seminary student is the father. Together they must go through hell to find a piece of heaven.”
This logline suggest a one plot beat.? What about the plot leading to an end? Using dpg's elements, revise your current logline and post again.
This logline suggest a one plot beat.? What about the plot leading to an end? Using dpg’s elements, revise your current logline and post again.
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