1. Posted: July 26, 2021In:

    A nurse saved her patients from secret genetic experimentation, but her investigation exposed her to some of the engineered DNA componenets. Will she survive to save the rest of the world? The rise of Chelsea Dahl, the worlds first nurse super hero!

    Nordic12 Penpusher

    Thank you.I've added a line to clear it up.

    Thank you.I’ve added a line to clear it up.

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  2. Posted: July 25, 2021In:

    When a young boy is taken away from his father, and starts to get raped by his mother, he must find a way to escape.

    Nordic12 Penpusher

    It reads like an opening line or a teaser not a complete logline. Also delete"When" and start with"A" and delete "starts to get raped" and insert "gets raped" to tighten it up and make the action more immediate

    It reads like an opening line or a teaser not a complete logline. Also delete”When” and start with”A” and delete “starts to get raped” and insert “gets raped” to tighten it up and make the action more immediate

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  3. Posted: June 28, 2014In:

    Before she dies, a terminally ill Irish banker, after keeping her 10-year-old daughter's birth a secret, must arrange for the young girl to meet her ex-baseball star/American father.

    Nordic12 Penpusher

    I like it. I have one question, when you say "meet with the father", are you implying the child lives in Ireland and will have to move to the US and live with the father?

    I like it. I have one question, when you say “meet with the father”, are you implying the child lives in Ireland and will have to move to the US and live with the father?

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