Sign Up Sign Up

Captcha Click on image to update the captcha.

Have an account? Sign In Now

Sign In Sign In

Forgot Password?

If you'd like access, Sign Up Here

Forgot Password Forgot Password

Lost your password? Please enter your email address. You will receive a link and will create a new password via email.

Captcha Click on image to update the captcha.

Have an account? Sign In Now

Sorry, you do not have permission to ask a question, You must login to ask a question.

Forgot Password?

To see everything, Sign Up Here

Sorry, you do not have permission to ask a question, You must login to ask a question.

Forgot Password?

To see everything, Sign Up Here

Please briefly explain why you feel this question should be reported.

Please briefly explain why you feel this answer should be reported.

Please briefly explain why you feel this user should be reported.

Logline It! Logo Logline It! Logo
Sign InSign Up

Logline It!

Logline It! Navigation

  • Sign Up
  • Logline Generator
  • Learn our simple Logline Formula
  • Search Loglines
Search
Post Your Logline

Mobile menu

Close
Post Your Logline
  • Signup
  • Sign Up
  • Logline Generator
  • Learn our simple Logline Formula
  • Search Loglines
  • About
  • Questions
  • Answers
  • Best Answers
  1. Posted: June 19, 2012In: Public

    1895 in Central Queensland and, with the country in turmoil, a young city poet and journalist travels to a remote sheep station to track down a political agitator. When the clashes between union shearers and landowners turn to violence, a man is found dead in a billabong. Was it suicide or murder?

    patrockable
    Added an answer on June 26, 2012 at 5:22 pm

    Sorry, forgot: Patrockable, Judge

    Sorry, forgot:
    Patrockable, Judge

    See less
    • 0
    • Share
      Share
      • Share on Facebook
      • Share on Twitter
      • Share on LinkedIn
      • Share on WhatsApp
  2. Posted: June 19, 2012In: Public

    After a road accident on the highway, a young man finds himself trapped in a strange, remote town where nothing ? and no one ? is as it seems.

    patrockable
    Added an answer on June 26, 2012 at 5:19 pm

    Having car trouble then seeking help in a remote town is a very overused idea. Avoid vague phrases like "where nothing ? and no one ? is as it seems", and instead tell us more about who the main character is, his strength and flaw, what the threat in the town is, and what he must do to overcome it.Read more

    Having car trouble then seeking help in a remote town is a very overused idea.

    Avoid vague phrases like “where nothing ? and no one ? is as it seems”, and instead tell us more about who the main character is, his strength and flaw, what the threat in the town is, and what he must do to overcome it. If these are unique enough, you’ll get interest.

    See less
    • 0
    • Share
      Share
      • Share on Facebook
      • Share on Twitter
      • Share on LinkedIn
      • Share on WhatsApp
  3. Posted: June 19, 2012In: Public

    1895 in Central Queensland and, with the country in turmoil, a young city poet and journalist travels to a remote sheep station to track down a political agitator. When the clashes between union shearers and landowners turn to violence, a man is found dead in a billabong. Was it suicide or murder?

    patrockable
    Added an answer on June 26, 2012 at 5:05 pm

    There are two interesting story ideas here: tracking down a political agitator, and solving a murder mystery. Which the main story? I'd focus on describing only the main one. Also, who's the main character, the poet or the journalist? What is his strength, and flaw? Why is tracking down an agitatorRead more

    There are two interesting story ideas here: tracking down a political agitator, and solving a murder mystery. Which the main story? I’d focus on describing only the main one.

    Also, who’s the main character, the poet or the journalist? What is his strength, and flaw? Why is tracking down an agitator or solving the murder mystery important to him? Including this will make the reader care more about the outcome.

    Opening with “1895 in Central Queensland”? Not sure who this is for, but for the younger crowd: ZZZZ. Perhaps, to draw them in, you should start with the story first, then mention the time and locale at the end. Once they’ve read a solid hook, they won’t care as much.

    See less
    • 0
    • Share
      Share
      • Share on Facebook
      • Share on Twitter
      • Share on LinkedIn
      • Share on WhatsApp
1 … 15 16 17 18 19 … 29

Sidebar

Stats

  • Loglines 8,014
  • Reviews 32,205
  • Best Reviews 629
  • Users 3,788

Adv 120x600

aalan

Explore

  • Signup

Footer

© 2022 Karel Segers. All Rights Reserved
With Love from Immersion Screenwriting.