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?Sent to evaluate the crew and staff of a new U.S. state-of-the-art nuclear submarine during its trial runs, the head of the U. S. DoD PsyOps Division discovers her vengeful ex husband has planted a computer virus to destroy her while on board. Will this deadly psychological war destroy everything??
I do not know of any other way to explain it. The Director of the DoD is the major factor in the movie. The entire movie centers around her.
I do not know of any other way to explain it. The Director of the DoD is the major factor in the movie. The entire movie centers around her.
See less?Sent to evaluate the crew and staff of a new U.S. state-of-the-art nuclear submarine during its trial runs, the head of the U. S. DoD PsyOps Division discovers her vengeful ex husband has planted a computer virus to destroy her while on board. Will this deadly psychological war destroy everything??
You?ve obviously put a lot of thought and time into your story. [Actually, I am still working out the details.] But as I said in an aside exchange, the challenge of writing a logline for an episode for an established TV series is different than for a pure spec story created ex nihilo. [Actually, I aRead more
You?ve obviously put a lot of thought and time into your story. [Actually, I am still working out the details.]
See lessBut as I said in an aside exchange, the challenge of writing a logline for an episode for an established TV series is different than for a pure spec story created ex nihilo. [Actually, I am working on a movie idea that I plan on turning into its own television series. If NCIS declines, I can still use the basic idea and go with it. No harm done.]
It seems to me that all the feedback you?ve gotten indicates you?ve got a dilemma. [Oh?] Either you can write a log line with a juicy hook that appeals to all the fish in the ocean (of which the visitors to this site constitute a representative sample). [Right.]
OR you can bait the hook to target a few fish ? in one fish bowl: the producers and directors of the TV series in Hollyweird. [Ok.]
But you can?t do both. [No?]
You seem to have dismissed or rebutted almost every comment posted. [Actually, I have not. Everything that everybody has said has been most valuable. They ask questions, I answer them. If I have questions, I get answers.]
You?ve gone to great lengths to fill us in with back story and character details so we can understand the log line. [Right.]
Details we shouldn?t have to know: A log line has to stand on its own, on its own 30 words. it shouldn?t require hundreds of words of explanation. [That’s what I am still trying to do. I am not sure how to cut it down any further. That is why I am still asking for help.]
And the only target audience who don?t need all that explanation to grasp the log line are the few fish in that one fish bowl in Hollyweird. [Ok.]
Ultimately, you have to craft the log line for that small audience. [So, which am I supposed to target? All of the fish or the ones that I will have to first see, i. e., the few fish in the fishbowl?]
But it seems we are not representative of that small audience ? not even avid fans of the series as you are.
Consequently, there is a limit to the feedback we can give. [Ok. So, how do I wrap up the log line and bring it down to the industry standard.]
?Sent to evaluate the crew and staff of a new U.S. state-of-the-art nuclear submarine during its trial runs, the head of the U. S. DoD PsyOps Division discovers her vengeful ex husband has planted a computer virus to destroy her while on board. Will this deadly psychological war destroy everything??
How exactly does it lose you?
How exactly does it lose you?
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