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Revised: A reformed crime lord is living a peaceful life until his wife is kidnapped by his former comrades, where, in order to keep her safe, he must do a list of dark deeds on numerous syndicates or watch his wife’s gruesome demise.
If you tweak Richiev's logline, still consider a better sense of irony for the character.? Having been a crime boss makes him well suited to pull off dark deeds,? unless they're different than what he used to do. A specific one or two can help paint more of the picture. Will the protag actually commRead more
If you tweak Richiev’s logline, still consider a better sense of irony for the character.? Having been a crime boss makes him well suited to pull off dark deeds,? unless they’re different than what he used to do. A specific one or two can help paint more of the picture.
Will the protag actually commit serious crimes or find ways around them? Different stories and tones.
See lessA college student wakes up in a world where the laws of nature can be rewritten and must find a way to escape before he is trapped indefinitely.
Agree with the others.Say more than college student, even if the protag is an innocent type without a significant flaw. While we await clarifications on the rest, consider what exactly is the hook. The alternate universe is half the equation; the other half is the specific protag. What makes this guRead more
Agree with the others.
Say more than college student, even if the protag is an innocent type without a significant flaw. While we await clarifications on the rest, consider what exactly is the hook. The alternate universe is half the equation; the other half is the specific protag. What makes this guy’s time in the universe the funniest or hardest or x-est of all possible protags? Like Groundhog Day, there’s the alternate universe of the day repeating in that small town and then there’s the specific protag who has the hardest time in it and, of course, the most to learn from it.
See lessA fledgling engineer must venture into space and repair their spaceship before it ceases to function.
Along the lines of Mike, look to highlight the hook or irony. And, yes, the stakes in the logline should be more than the loss of the ship.I find the short logline formula only helps at the very first stage of fleshing out the idea. Try in the next take to paint more of the picture.Who does "their"Read more
Along the lines of Mike, look to highlight the hook or irony. And, yes, the stakes in the logline should be more than the loss of the ship.
I find the short logline formula only helps at the very first stage of fleshing out the idea. Try in the next take to paint more of the picture.
Who does “their” refer to?
Is this set in the present or future? Operating from Earth or another planet?
Who or what is the antag?
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