1. Posted: August 27, 2016In:

    In the future, all mental Illness is illegal. After a teen?s girlfriend is taken away due to early detection of a mental defect, he searches to find an error with the brain scanning machine but uncovers a dark secret.

    RussellN Samurai

    Understand the premise, the goal and the challenge, but there isn't a clear goal - Why does this dark secret matter to him, her or society? Tell us why the dark secret must remain a secret, or what will happen if the info is made public.

    Understand the premise, the goal and the challenge, but there isn’t a clear goal – Why does this dark secret matter to him, her or society? Tell us why the dark secret must remain a secret, or what will happen if the info is made public.

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  2. Posted: July 29, 2013In:

    When an encounter with the Grim Reaper confirms there is an afterlife, a prolific serial killer seeks forgiveness from the only victim of his to have ever survived.

    RussellN Samurai

    Agree this sounds an interesting idea. But spell out why an afterlife is important, or getting forgiveness is important - what does he stand to lose if he doesn't get that forgiveness.

    Agree this sounds an interesting idea. But spell out why an afterlife is important, or getting forgiveness is important – what does he stand to lose if he doesn’t get that forgiveness.

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  3. Posted: May 28, 2014In:

    Chris, an architectural intern falls for a mysterious woman named Samantha, but she seems to know a lot about him, maybe too much. Is he just overthinking or is there more to Samantha than meets the eye?

    RussellN Samurai

    I feel this is more of a tagline, to get the audience interested. And I believe a logline shouldn't be a question (but the experts will have more to say).

    I feel this is more of a tagline, to get the audience interested. And I believe a logline shouldn’t be a question (but the experts will have more to say).

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