1. Posted: March 17, 2017In:

    A young na?ve soldier in love gets her leave denied but decides to go AWOL to fulfill her dying boyfriend’s wish only to find out that he has a more sinister plan behind those weary eyes.

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    RussellN Samurai

    Try "When a young, naive soldier is denied leave?and goes AWOL, she discovers ?her dying boyfriend has a sinister plan ". ?Can you see that it says the same thing but the phrasing is?more "punchy"? ?Now over to the real experts.

    Try “When a young, naive soldier is denied leave?and goes AWOL, she discovers ?her dying boyfriend has a sinister plan “. ?Can you see that it says the same thing but the phrasing is?more “punchy”? ?Now over to the real experts.

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  2. Posted: January 10, 2017In:

    The lives of a fierce punk rock teen girl, a lunatic homeless assassin, and a long dead soldier intertwine in a tale of violence and redemption.

    RussellN Samurai

    To me, there is no "WHY" they get together, and no goal to achieve. But I do like the concept of intertwining three such different characters - there's lots of opportunity for interpersonal conflict, crossed purposes, double-crosses, misinformation etc.

    To me, there is no “WHY” they get together, and no goal to achieve.

    But I do like the concept of intertwining three such different characters – there’s lots of opportunity for interpersonal conflict, crossed purposes, double-crosses, misinformation etc.

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  3. Posted: January 10, 2017In:

    Desperate to make money, Tyler impersonates his twin sister taking her job as an Ubher driver. With Ryley as his passenger, the two hit a series of road bumps along the way that makes a trip from the San Fernando Valley to Los Angeles much longer than expected.

    RussellN Samurai

    It seems a bit disconnected - is Ryley his sister or his Ubher passenger? ?It does have?a good?amount of implied questions to intrigue.

    It seems a bit disconnected – is Ryley his sister or his Ubher passenger? ?It does have?a good?amount of implied questions to intrigue.

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