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An estranged couple decides for a last-chance counseling retreat in a forest just to meet a therapist who reveals their secrets that should rather have remained buried
I think that what Lee means is tell us in a few words "why" the couple is alienated/estranged ? Don't ask me how to do this in one or two words? After an alienated couple on a therapeutic hiking trip gets captured by a( retired) 'Doctor Death* ' and his killer dog, they must firs confront each otherRead more
I think that what Lee means is tell us in a few words “why” the couple is alienated/estranged ? Don’t ask me how to do this in one or two words?
After an alienated couple on a therapeutic hiking trip gets captured by a( retired) ‘Doctor Death* ‘ and his killer dog, they must firs confront each other before they can succesfully outsmart their nemisis and survive..?
* http://www.nydailynews.com/news/justice-story/dr-death-britain-prolific-serial-killer-article-1.1423566
“An alienated couple must first confront each other in order to successfully confront the psychopath. Yes, here I feel the irony of an almost impossible task. ” Second try:
Killer Therapy
After an alienated couple on a therapeutic hiking trip gets captured by a retired psychopathic shrink and his bloodthirsty psychotic dog, they must firs confront each other before they can succesfully outsmart their nemisis and survive..?
Hey, maybe they convince the dog to attack his boss.
Also giving us a mini-step outline (like DGP did for me), makes things clearer – fiil in Act one, Act 2a, Midpoint, Twist, Act 3 leads to Resulution – and leads to the best logline.
You can also do an X meets X to get a clearer picture in your head.
* http://www.nydailynews.com/news/justice-story/dr-death-britain-prolific-serial-killer-article-1.1423566
See lessAn estranged couple decides for a last-chance counseling retreat in a forest just to meet a therapist who reveals their secrets that should rather have remained buried
"After an alienated couple on hiking therapy gets captured by a horrific villain and his killer dog, they must get on tems with each other in order to escape." Find a beter word for: (1) "get on terms" = slick team (2) _"?n order to" = must? (3) forced to = must ? "After an alienated couple on a hikRead more
“After an alienated couple on hiking therapy gets captured by a horrific villain and his killer dog, they must get on tems with each other in order to escape.”
Find a beter word for:
(1) “get on terms” = slick team
(2) _”?n order to” = must?
(3) forced to = must ?
“After an alienated couple on a hiking trip gets captured by a horrific villain and his killer dog, they must build a slick team and escape.”
Using ‘forced” makes the antag active instead of the protags. This although tells us they have to work hard.
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Yes, a two sentence logline is acceptable although it?s not called a logLINE" for nothing. https://redhotwritingtips.wordpress.com/2011/05/02/logline-what-it-is-and-how-to-write-one/#comments And yes, your logline is already much better and shorter without losing basic info. Good job. OK, forget MERead more
Yes, a two sentence logline is acceptable although it?s not called a logLINE” for nothing.
https://redhotwritingtips.wordpress.com/2011/05/02/logline-what-it-is-and-how-to-write-one/#comments
And yes, your logline is already much better and shorter without losing basic info. Good job.
OK, forget ME saying a mini-series and forget YOU thinking about a 3 hour movie. WHY? Lett’s say by some kind of a miracle your FIRST screenplay ends up on the table of an executive producer; he/she will use it as a platter for his/her delicious cappuccino while reading the next 105 page long blockbuster. —
A precious opportunity wasted!!
Why your script is muchhhhhhh to long: one page approximately stands for 1 minute screen time; 180 pages stand for 3 hours of screen time. Imagion you being a executive producer. When you have to read 3 screenplays a day – and you?re looking at a mounting of screenplays in front of you ? would you pick a 180 pages long screenplay or 105 pages long (with the same potential)?!
A long screenplay automatically stands for an expensive movie!
Your script should be 115 pages max. I guess a short and clear logline stand for a well written standard (think pages) script. Don’t punish yourself trimming a 180 page script down to 115 pages. It?s Hell; believe me, I tried it…..and failed!! That’s why I like this forum!
Now you know what your biggest challenge will be…
Hope this helps, and talk to you later.
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