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?When a rookie undercover officer mistakenly finds himself admitted to a college that trains criminals, he will have to play a balancing act in order to please his superiors and prove he's one of the guys.?
When a rookie police officer finds himself admitted to a college that trains criminals, he will have to play a balancing act in order to both hide his situation from his superiors and prove he is one of the guys.? I think it would be way more interesting if his superiors know nothing about what's goRead more
When a rookie police officer finds himself admitted to a college that trains criminals, he will have to play a balancing act in order to both hide his situation from his superiors and prove he is one of the guys.?
I think it would be way more interesting if his superiors know nothing about what’s going on but they are investigating the college and the protagonist is on the team that’s investigating the college. That way he has to balance being a student and learning and befriending all these criminals and at the same time trying to not give himself away to the other police officers.
See less"When an upper-class rebel is suddenly disinherited by his fed-up father, he struggles to win his father?s approval in order to have his inheritance restored, but his plans derail when he is forcibly drafted to fight in the second US civil war."
~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ REWRITE: "When a well off trouble-making teenager is disinherited by his father in order to teach him a lesson he struggles and fails to win back his father's approval, but he gains the ultimate chance to prove his worth when he is drafted to fight in the War of 2079." ~~~~~~~~~~Read more
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REWRITE:
“When a well off trouble-making teenager is disinherited by his father in order to teach him a lesson he struggles and fails to win back his father’s approval, but he gains the ultimate chance to prove his worth when he is drafted to fight in the War of 2079.”
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See less( mrliteral, I will not be satisfied until I have your approval. 🙂 )
Thoughts on this one? I’m trying to give the feeling that after the son is disinherited, he kind of sees the error of his ways and he has a eureka moment and tries to gain his father’s trust again but fails. Then this incident happens (he is drafted) and he suddenly has a perfect opportunity to show not only his father but himself that he can do something meaningful with his life. Until now he has just been a rich brat with too much time on his hands.
PS. thanks for the comments so far
"When an upper-class rebel is suddenly disinherited by his fed-up father, he struggles to win his father?s approval in order to have his inheritance restored, but his plans derail when he is forcibly drafted to fight in the second US civil war."
~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ REWRITE: Thank you everyone for your comments. How's this: "When a rebelling, upper-class, teenager is disinherited by his father, he struggles to win his father?s approval, but his priorities change when he is drafted into a war that will change his outlook on life forever." LetRead more
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REWRITE:
Thank you everyone for your comments. How’s this:
“When a rebelling, upper-class, teenager is disinherited by his father, he struggles to win his father?s approval, but his priorities change when he is drafted into a war that will change his outlook on life forever.”
Let me know what you think!
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