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Alex and Eve
A Greek Orthodox boy falls in love with a Lebanese Muslim girl creating a mismatch made in heaven. Based on the hugely crowd-pleasing play of the same name A modern day Romeo and Juliet story. It is often said there are only a handful of genuine stories, and a million different ways to tell them. ThRead more
A Greek Orthodox boy falls in love with a Lebanese Muslim girl creating a mismatch made in heaven. Based on the hugely crowd-pleasing play of the same name
A modern day Romeo and Juliet story. It is often said there are only a handful of genuine stories, and a million different ways to tell them. This is one of those concepts. Sets up some real conflict between the families and the cultures. I think the genre is clear, as well, considering the seriousness of the topic (certainly NOT a rom/com)
The issue is in mentioning the play. Congratulations to you, if you are the original playwright, but it is not fitting to put this in a logline. It reads more like an ad or tagline.
With that gone, you can take that prime real estate and add some more information that will add to the interest and make it much more effective, like additional conflict, or a second obstacle beyond just their cultural. If they each come from powerful families-one high-placed politician’s family, the other perhaps more a violent, anti-gov’t family. Watch the cliches in this, though. It’s easy to fall into that trap. If you feel a clich coming on, flip it, but I’m not sure how the original play “played out”.
Good luck with it. Sounds intriguing.
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I think it's a wonderful concept, and a brilliant title. The glaring issue I had when first reading it is that it reads like a comedy, until we learn that it is a thriller. I think the original premise is farcical and quite a nice "high concept"- anger management for ghosts! You can still make it coRead more
I think it’s a wonderful concept, and a brilliant title. The glaring issue I had when first reading it is that it reads like a comedy, until we learn that it is a thriller. I think the original premise is farcical and quite a nice “high concept”- anger management for ghosts! You can still make it comedic, with him trying to find out who killed them all and their connection, and make it an interesting ride.
I think if you cut out the unnecessary words, you’ll have an excellent logline:
“A clinical psychologist life gets complicated when he reluctantly accepts that his new patients are ghosts, killed on the same day, and under mysterious circumstances.”
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Sorry, patrockable, I didn't read your explanation all the way through, so much of what I said is somewhat meaningless and redundant.
Sorry, patrockable, I didn’t read your explanation all the way through, so much of what I said is somewhat meaningless and redundant.
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