1. Posted: May 7, 2013In:

    When a starving empire?s water mines run dry, two slave girls must revive a mythical power that could save the world.

    Zane Pinner

    Sure - yes the script came first :) It's just interesting to see how rearranging the elements of the logline/sentence can describe such a different story!

    Sure – yes the script came first 🙂

    It’s just interesting to see how rearranging the elements of the logline/sentence can describe such a different story!

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  2. Posted: May 7, 2013In:

    When a starving empire?s water mines run dry, two slave girls must revive a mythical power that could save the world.

    Zane Pinner

    Thanks for the suggestion Tor Dollhouse but I'm not really sure what you're getting at - your logline may have a better sentence structure (?) but it's actually describing quite a different script to the one I've written...

    Thanks for the suggestion Tor Dollhouse but I’m not really sure what you’re getting at – your logline may have a better sentence structure (?) but it’s actually describing quite a different script to the one I’ve written…

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  3. Posted: May 7, 2013In:

    When a starving empire?s water mines run dry, two slave girls must revive a mythical power that could save the world.

    Zane Pinner

    Thanks for the feedback everyone, I made a couple of alterations based on your suggestions before submitting to the competition thingy :)

    Thanks for the feedback everyone, I made a couple of alterations based on your suggestions before submitting to the competition thingy 🙂

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