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unwitting uber driver tries to deliver the young teen he picked up safe after discovering she is chased by a group of terrorist.
This is a very timely subject. You might consider adding information as to flesh out why the Uber driver "must" help?the teen?(what's stopping him from?just driving to the police station or dropping her off at a crowded?mall?), more of a description of the teen's character ?(e.g. non-English speakinRead more
When several soldiers mysteriously die during training, a young soldier learns that his supervisor is responsible for the deaths and must fight to prevent future deaths.
Sounds like a great premise, I have a few suggestions you might (or might not!) want to play with.?Consider upping the stakes by adding an adjective to specify the odd/gruesome/etc. details about the deaths , include a?character flaw by adding a different?adjective to describe the soldier (e.g. paraRead more
Sounds like a great premise, I have a few suggestions you might (or might not!) want to play with.?Consider upping the stakes by adding an adjective to specify the odd/gruesome/etc. details about the deaths , include a?character flaw by adding a different?adjective to describe the soldier (e.g. paranoid, overly zealous, former juvenile delinquent, etc.)?Maybe strengthen the “is responsible for the deaths” with something less passive (e.g. sacrificed his men in a corrupt power-play, or similar) and maybe strengthen the stakes by adding a consequence for failure (e.g. .. must fight to prevent future deaths… “including his own” or “before he is court-martialed”? or “before his supervisor discovers he is exposed” or something along those lines.??Best of luck
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