1. Posted: January 18, 2020In:

    When a desperate PTSD sufferer is sent to an experimental therapy centre, she finds herself fighting for her life against the twisted therapists who by prey on their patients? worst fears to increase the adrenaline in their ?meat? and satisfy their cannibalistic hunger.

    The_CNI Samurai

    A better way to word this would be: "When she is sent to new mental health facility, an emotional vulnerable woman must escape before she falls prey to the twisted cannibalistic therapists who use her worst fears against her". This sounds like grindhouse-style exploitation more than traditional horrRead more

    A better way to word this would be:

    “When she is sent to new mental health facility, an emotional vulnerable woman must escape before she falls prey to the twisted cannibalistic therapists who use her worst fears against her”.

    This sounds like grindhouse-style exploitation more than traditional horror. There have been quite a few stories partaining to “patients sent to an asylum of horror”. What’s different about this concept? Could the reason for their PTSD relate to the plot? Perhaps she is a veteran of war?

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  2. Posted: November 25, 2019In:

    When the new couple in town, both ex-cons, are suspected of murdering a cop’s daughter, they set out to entrap who they believe is the real perpetrator – before the town’s mass hysteria turns violent.

    The_CNI Samurai

    I think there is more of a hook if you were to change it from a "Cops daughter" to someone more high ranking such as the daughter of the Mayor, Commissioner, respected rich landlord etc. Also this adds to the other question, why not just leave? They are new to this town to start anew before shit hitRead more

    I think there is more of a hook if you were to change it from a “Cops daughter” to someone more high ranking such as the daughter of the Mayor, Commissioner, respected rich landlord etc. Also this adds to the other question, why not just leave? They are new to this town to start anew before shit hits the fan, so why stay here? It might work better if it was their hometown.

    “A newly engaged couple, both ex-cons, return to their hometown, but when they are suspected of murdering the mayors daughter, they set out to entrap the real killer ? before the paranoid townsfolk lynch them.”

     

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  3. Posted: November 28, 2019In:

    When bank robbers and their hostages encounter a backwoods family, they are held captive for a sacrificial ritual, and must work together to escape before becoming human cattle.

    The_CNI Samurai

    For a future logline, you also need to answer the question of then what? What is meant by "human cattle"? Are they a backwards cannibal redneck family? Satanic cult? Been done many times, how is this different? The concept alone of victimizer becoming the victim adds intrigue but further detail willRead more

    For a future logline, you also need to answer the question of then what? What is meant by “human cattle”? Are they a backwards cannibal redneck family? Satanic cult? Been done many times, how is this different? The concept alone of victimizer becoming the victim adds intrigue but further detail will really help sell this.

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