1. Posted: January 12, 2020In:

    When his old friend from WWI kills himself, a good-hearted rancher sets off on a harrowing odyssey across Great Depression-era America to personally deliver a letter to the man’s long lost love.

    thedarkhorse Samurai

    Longer/different versions: When his old friend from WWI kills himself, a good-hearted rancher sets off on a harrowing odyssey across Great Depression-era America to personally deliver a letter to the man's long lost love - and along the way, he reconnect with three war friends, each still strugglingRead more

    Longer/different versions:

    When his old friend from WWI kills himself, a good-hearted rancher sets off on a harrowing odyssey across Great Depression-era America to personally deliver a letter to the man’s long lost love – and along the way, he reconnect with three war friends, each still struggling to reintegrate with society.

    A good-hearted rancher sets off on a harrowing odyssey across Great Depression-era America to personally deliver a letter to a deceased war friend’s long lost love, and along the way – reconnects with three war friends, each still struggling to reintegrate with society.

    Notes:

    It doesn’t feel like I have room for the “three war friends” party in the logline I’m headlining with. The letter is his goal. Great Depression-era America (with it’s thieves, bootleggers, etc.) provides some conflict – but I’m unsure if it’s enough.

    The Inciting Incident – I’m not sure about. It’s either recieving the letter from his deceased WW1 friend – which asks him to “look after our friends” as well as to deliver it the letter to his long-lost love. (who may or may not be at the destination – another potential conflict. He’s doing this thing on pure hope and faith she’s still there and alive.)

    Another incident, has our rancher hero kicked off his land by the bank. He’s essentially homeless and working his way up to California anyways. (The ending has our hero deliver the letter and finally heading to California down a lone, sunny road. He finally “moves on”.)

    Our hero taking a detour – to deliver the letter and to see his old war friends is our PP1. He’s at a crossroads – he can either go with the kind-natured family he’s met along the way or take the long, scary road by himself ha.

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  2. Posted: January 10, 2020In:

    A thirty-something manchild, desperate to get his recently-dumped best friend laid, takes him to a party where his friend falls for a woman who only wants sex, whilst he falls in love for the first time… with his friend’s ex-fiance.

    thedarkhorse Samurai

    Hi Mike, I'm going to plot this out today... You might be right about the B-plot thing - we'll see. I want to show how the friends are going in opposite directions, the straight man/recently dumped/wants-commitment and marriage falls for a woman who only wants sex. Meanwhile, the manchild/mr.uncommiRead more

    Hi Mike,

    I’m going to plot this out today…

    You might be right about the B-plot thing – we’ll see. I want to show how the friends are going in opposite directions, the straight man/recently dumped/wants-commitment and marriage falls for a woman who only wants sex.

    Meanwhile, the manchild/mr.uncommitable falls for someone who does want commitment… and who happens to be the ex. They have met before. She was looking for “lightning” or “that spark” – which is why she dumped our straight man. She finds “lightning” with the manchild.

    So yeah – we’ve got four people. Plenty of conflict. I might heighten this by making the two women best friends. We’ll see. That might be too much. But it will certainly build to an interesting boiling point.

    It was going to be about sex, love, relationships, friendships and growing up. That bromance will still be at the forefront of things.

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  3. Posted: January 2, 2020In:

    An ambitious young actor begins a passionate love affair with a washed-up but wealthy older actress, however, her family suspect he’s a gold-digger and set out to undermine his career.

    thedarkhorse Samurai

    Okay... I'm just playing around here.Longer logline:?An ambitious young actor trying to break into Hollywood, begins a passionate love affair with a washed up older actress, however, her family suspects he?s a gold-digger and set out to undermine his career.Not sure if I need "trying to break into HRead more

    Okay… I’m just playing around here.

    Longer logline:?

    An ambitious young actor trying to break into Hollywood, begins a passionate love affair with a washed up older actress, however, her family suspects he?s a gold-digger and set out to undermine his career.

    Not sure if I need “trying to break into Hollywood” as “ambitious young actor” probably does most of the work.

    The family I reckon are projecting. They’re the money-grubbing ones.

    The Sophie’s Choice dilemma would be love or career. I think this guy does genuinely love the girl – but there should always be doubt over why he’s with her… Perhaps even from her?.. As well as him?

    Perhaps he is attracted to the glamour she offers. Perhaps she knows this – but still relishes his company and what he offers.

    Just brainstorming here…

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