1. Posted: February 19, 2016In:

    After being transported to a surreal world where she accidently kills the first person she meets, a young girl must team up with three strangers to kill again in order to get back home. (The Wizard of Oz)

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  2. Posted: January 29, 2016In:

    Trapped in an all-night bank siege, a by-the-book bank teller must outwit both cops and robbers to escape with 100k from the bank?s vault to pay-off his brothers gambling debt.

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    Tony Edward Samurai

    Thanks for the feedback dpg. You're ?right on here... What's missing from the logline is that the hero has till dawn to pay off these dodgy bookies or the brother is a dead man...and the debt passes onto the hero (cliched, I know...brother is a irresponsible loser, hero is an uptight goody goody...)Read more

    Thanks for the feedback dpg.

    You’re ?right on here… What’s missing from the logline is that the hero has till dawn to pay off these dodgy bookies or the brother is a dead man…and the debt passes onto the hero (cliched, I know…brother is a irresponsible loser, hero is an uptight goody goody…). He manages to nab the vault cash, but before he can leave the bank it gets held up..the cops arrive and it becomes a hostage siege… Hilarity ensues?

    I’ve got about 3 or 4 variations on the concept — this one seems to fit/ flow the best when confining to 30 words in a logline.

    Anyway, good to hear from you and hope you’re writing is going well.

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  3. Posted: January 29, 2016In:

    An aging songwriter used to be wildly successful, but lost his fame when the inspiration for all his songs, his wife, left him. Now, he has been kidnapped by an aspiring singer, who is giving him 3 months to write a great album for the young singer to steal. Having been unable to write anything good for years, the aged star must try to make his ex-wife fall back in love with him, in order to regain his writing ability and save his life.

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    Tony Edward Samurai

    I like this premise -- the logine is in need of some refining though... way too wordy, maybe explaining more than it needs to. Below is just my take: "When kidnapped by a desperate pop-star wanna be and forced into writing an album for him, ?a once famous songwriter must reconcile with his muse ? hiRead more

    I like this premise — the logine is in need of some refining though… way too wordy, maybe explaining more than it needs to. Below is just my take:

    “When kidnapped by a desperate pop-star wanna be and forced into writing an album for him, ?a once famous songwriter must reconcile with his muse ? his ex wife, for inspiration.”

    Good luck with it.

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