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When a cattle drover losses the bonus his family was counting on to survive, he turns to bounty hunting War Criminals in a Post-apocolyptic Australian Outback.
I think technically the logline could be tightened up a bit -- for a feature film at least -- you could be more specific in terms of his goal (i.e. how many war crims would it take for him to save the family farm etc...?) or, you could include a ticking clock -- BUT -- I think it's a killer concept,Read more
I think technically the logline could be tightened up a bit — for a feature film at least — you could be more specific in terms of his goal (i.e. how many war crims would it take for him to save the family farm etc…?) or, you could include a ticking clock — BUT — I think it’s a killer concept, particularly if pitched as a TV series, where I think you could get away with it as is in that context. I am drawn to the MC, as he reads as a hard working guy wanting to do anything to save his family and livelihood, can envisage some great action and suspense, and can see the potential arc of the MC (something that could be made even more clearer through character description in the logline…)… and Australia is still a great locale for shooting a post apocalyptic landscape — I see Mad Max (“Road Warrior” for those outside Australia…) meets The Road, meets Must Be The Place…
Best of luck — good stuff.
See lessWhen a cattle drover losses the bonus his family was counting on to survive, he turns to bounty hunting War Criminals in a Post-apocolyptic Australian Outback.
I think technically the logline could be tightened up a bit -- for a feature film at least -- you could be more specific in terms of his goal (i.e. how many war crims would it take for him to save the family farm etc...?) or, you could include a ticking clock -- BUT -- I think it's a killer concept,Read more
I think technically the logline could be tightened up a bit — for a feature film at least — you could be more specific in terms of his goal (i.e. how many war crims would it take for him to save the family farm etc…?) or, you could include a ticking clock — BUT — I think it’s a killer concept, particularly if pitched as a TV series, where I think you could get away with it as is in that context. I am drawn to the MC, as he reads as a hard working guy wanting to do anything to save his family and livelihood, can envisage some great action and suspense, and can see the potential arc of the MC (something that could be made even more clearer through character description in the logline…)… and Australia is still a great locale for shooting a post apocalyptic landscape — I see Mad Max (“Road Warrior” for those outside Australia…) meets The Road, meets Must Be The Place…
Best of luck — good stuff.
See lessAfter the legalization of marijuana leads to a dishonest pot-dealer receiving a huge tax bill, the de-motivated must become motivated before he can lead a one man crusade against a clean-cut district attorney to have the drug 're-criminalized'. (Am VERY interested in hearing some alternate titles for this. The punnier the better!)
I agree with both posts above -- the premise has a lot of promise -- but the logical issues raised by Nir would need to be dealt with. Dpg's take loses the logical issues, delivers the juicy part of the story, and also makes a subtle yet potentially powerful twist as describing the hero as a pot HEARead more
I agree with both posts above — the premise has a lot of promise — but the logical issues raised by Nir would need to be dealt with. Dpg’s take loses the logical issues, delivers the juicy part of the story, and also makes a subtle yet potentially powerful twist as describing the hero as a pot HEAD as opposed to DEALER… more potential for dramatic and comedic depth, imo…
ATM your hero has two goals — he must “…become motivated” and must “lead a one man crusade against a clean cut district attorney ….” — it’s too spoon-fed — set him up as lazy/ unmotivated through his character description and then you only need to tell us that he must “lead a one man crusade against etc etc etc…” Let the audience join the dots…
Best of luck with it — as Nir said, lots of examples of great pothead MC’s, they make great MC’s because they are immediately flawed through the fact they have a dependency on an drug … Their is something about themselves that they are hiding from through the use of the drug (any drug…) — and typically are their own worst enemy as they keep f#cking up, their problem is self inflicted — ripe for good drama even if the film is full of laughs…(take Bill Murray’s character in The Life Aquatic as an example…)
Regards.
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