Hi Michael,

This sounds cool… but a little dangerous — IMO… not strictly cliched; the bad (crazy) cop, good (straight) cop buddy movie is almost a genre in itself …Lethal Weapon/ The Other Guys/ L.A. Confidential/ 48 hours, Another 48 hours… and Good Cop, Bad Cop — A Canadian film released in 2006 (you might need to look at your title… but your plot sounds completely different …). The thing that all the aforementioned films have in common, apart from falling into what could be described as the Buddy ‘Cop’ genre, is that the buddy’s always team up to fight the foe in the end, despite their differences — in fact it’s usually because of these differences that they can overcome the antagonist. This is not the case with this movie, as the buddy becomes the antagonist…(unless of course there is some other force behind the ‘conspiracy’) This could be a hook, but could also come across as messing with the genre implied in the logline (and especially the title). Anyway, it grabs my attention, and I get a good sense of the film… but…

I know I have posted to another of your posts my take on using more than one sentence to describe your film in the logline, but I feel it bares repeating — again, just all IMO —

You say that pitches are more exciting than loglines… I think they’re two different beasts. I also think a well constructed logline of one sentence serves a very good purpose (Query letters, for one…), and can be more exciting and intriguing than a pitch. For me, there is something rhythmic in it, a rise and fall that can (and should) mirror the rise and fall of your story… no need to give away the ending, but should contain: a hero – better with a flaw to overcome, an antagonist standing in the way of an object of desire, and, an inciting incident — just the one…. IMO, by using two sentences your are providing two inciting incidences, and not that’s the world’s greatest sin, but to me feels clunky (much like my waffle here ;))

… Good luck with it, and for FWIW:

‘A reckless cop must bring his masquerading clean cut partner to justice when he discovers he’s a vigilante working for a large sinister conspiracy’.